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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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Cloth purse, an aging ignorance. Leaving the lounge; your waving, bartender nodding an odd remembrance. The dress, no longer kind, as once when you were young all over. Feeling picked up, I hate the men who before have had you not bothering first to speak, teach, listen, some improving. I hate watching from behind a future: unloved, (pity is pity). You finally shuffling alone, still sifting for sense in garbage. |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Oh my gosh...a powerful poem that tears at the heart...Stunning in the vision it portrays and the feelings it gives... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes...a powerful piece |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I hate the men who before have had you This hits home, in more ways then you know... If I may add something...treat her with kindness and respect, but above all, with great responsiblity for her heart....even when she makes mistakes Love to you and hugs for this |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Huan Yi Even the vulture has grace, good write. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I hate watching from behind a future: unloved, Such a powerful write... excellent!! |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
not good. not good. not good at all. |
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