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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
storm cloud shadows blacken Saddleback Mountain - soon...the rain |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am not near any mt. but yes, could always feel the rain coming~~ took me awhile to understand your title  M |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ah, nicely wrought - steel gray sky high hues seeping white woven wonder six point fantasies same as rain, just on ice Susan Every action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
This is a success, very good. Who is your influence? |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
nakdthoughts - thank you. FYI I never title my haiku/senyru/tanka as it is inappropriate to title them. My "subject" is my own personal method for labeling my poems which I do for identification purposes within my files, I have written a couple thousand at least. I simply use the first letter of each line, I find it more effective than numbering as many haiku poets do. Susan - I like your offering...very nice. thanks for responding  Huan Yi - Ihave been writing and publishing these oriental forms for many years, so my style is my own now. But early on, and even now sometimes, my influence is mostly Basho, but also Issa and Buson(all the great masters of the form) Thank you for taking an interest and for responding to my poem. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I title mine for PIP because the site requires something in that box....and I've found it's an easy way for me to keep track of them....but when I show them the title doesn't come along for the ride. I hate numbering though -- it seems so crass for a thing as delicate as a haiku, and for me it spoils the mood. I'd rather break the tradition and title mine than break the spell before it's cast. This one by the way, is excellent....you just got added to my mental list of favorite folks to read! Have to admit I'm a bit prejudiced though, since I can see Saddleback Mountain from here, and I've watched the rainshadows myself. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nicely done |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
RAT - YOU CAN? WHERE ARE YOU LOCATED? IN SOCAL RIGHT? I WORK AT THE BASE IN THE RANCHO SANTA MARGARITA LIBRARY.....WASN'T THE SNOW EARLIER IN THE WEEK AMAZING? GOOGLE ME - YOU WILL FIND LOTS TO READ AND THANK YOU FOR READING TOO SHADOWS - MUCH APPRECIATED [This message has been edited by Beki (01-09-2005 04:28 PM).] |
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