When Wasteful War Shall Statues Overturn

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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2005-01-06 08:26 PM

When wasteful war shall statues overturn*
and profiteers plow back its molten shares
into the stocks piled higher than what burned
the time is nigh, examine their affairs

When god’s invoked as though he would condone
the carnage manufactured in his name
at that point what was right has been disowned
and since we know we too must wear the shame

When flaming hate is fanned by flapping flags
and tribal screeds leave room for no debate
it’s time to bite the fingers that they wag
and question who exactly is the State?

What’s come to pass is not as you’d have thought it
They lied, folks die, it’s broken and you bought it
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*I can only take credit for 13 of these lines.
The title line is from Shakespeare’s sonnet
“Not Marble Nor The Gilded Monuments”

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2005-01-06 08:31 PM

What’s come to pass is not as you’d have thought it
They lied, folks die, it’s broken and you bought it
.
.
.
A very well done Sonnet Richard, powerful in it's meaning. I enjoy the words you share..

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

2 posted 2005-01-07 01:27 PM

I absolutely LOVE your couplet. Effective, dramatic, and humorous-everything a couplet should be. War is hell, and sometimes people have to walk through hell. But doing it for any reason other than utmost necessity is ludicrous.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2005-01-07 01:33 PM

quote:
When god’s invoked as though he would condone
the carnage manufactured in his name
at that point what was right has been disowned
and since we know we too must wear the shame

I am going to hunt down a book if I can find it, and sent you some things in email Richard, that will not suprise you one bit.

Excellent work - all of it so profound and meaningful.

Carpe' Diem

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

4 posted 2005-01-07 02:08 PM

Shakespeare is nodding his head,
pleased that one line
could inspire such...

even though it be a sad and weary fact...

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

5 posted 2005-01-09 12:49 PM

brilliant...just brilliant

Martie

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6 posted 2005-01-09 12:56 PM

Richard

So well done!!

*Alli4000*

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7 posted 2005-01-09 01:33 AM

WOW!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

8 posted 2005-01-09 05:37 AM

how beautifully sadly written

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

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Ohio

9 posted 2005-01-09 08:38 AM

just who are these men
we surrender our faith to?

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

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10 posted 2005-01-09 10:31 AM

enjoyed

Midnitesun

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Gaia

11 posted 2005-01-09 08:37 PM

I think you might already guess why I appreciate this write.

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