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Iced, in Time
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Iced, in Time |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 Iced, in Time Look closely, oh, please where some eyes meeting green blue naturally and I would tanka for you a symbol of timely ice ~*~ Skate the winter scene, she said, but see me as I am, hidden, in time, shadowed, still the clearest of all, beholding your light, my love This all could not be, without warmth, first; snow does not fly if it starts, first, as rain, freezing rain and does not start from snow, no, but meets an edge, a cold, hard edge, and tempts nothing but falls, to encase time… Iced…too soon it shall meld with air, morphing but never crystallizing ever, its time spent, having its one chance… for its life, oh, so short… and we wonder, are we better with sharp crystallized edges of snow, or more welcome even as drops of iced rain, encompassing moments that we would hold to, forever; for they are not, cannot be reformed into snowballs of flight to hurt, or even in play, build castles; no that is what cannot be done…not with iced rain not when we are iced in time…. all we might do, is hold our moment and magnify our wise. Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A beautifully frozen moment in time Karilea.. Wonderful words and pic. hugs~ In the midst of winter, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I love how you see life |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Where the ice river churns over unquiet stone, spring is not a word. No lark will ever fly here, nor a crocus ever bloom. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Time is strange like that... how, even moving, it can etch itself into crevices where it cannot be touched, even if it was removed. And poetry is much the same.  Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"and I would tanka for you a symbol of timely ice" Sky tears falling, have frozen Having no emotions, sad; It wept only joy. Leaf-tips bejeweled by their touch, Sparkle with the weepers hue. ************************************* My how this poem holds my attention and inspires, Like winter encapsulates branches All life seems jailed within the structure But in reality, there is great movement.... I am a familiar lover of ice Having danced on its stage for countless hours, Which makes this poem dear to me Thank you for it, Karilea..... _____________ice/ford ><> |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Like Nancy said, wonderful picture. "and we wonder, are we better with sharp crystallized edges of snow, or more welcome even as drops of iced rain, encompassing moments that we would hold to, forever; for they are not, cannot be reformed into snowballs of flight to hurt, or even in play, build castles; no" This recalls to me "The Moving Finger writes; and, having writ, Moves on: nor all thy Piety nor Wit Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line, Nor all thy Tears wash out a Word of it" A great read on a chilly morn in Oregon! Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
warming not chilling...how is that? ah, it's Karilea! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
All we can do is contemplate in AWE this splendour, iced in Time. Wonderful! Love, Margherita |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Iced…too soon it shall meld with air, morphing but never crystallizing ever, its time spent, having its one chance… for its life, oh, so short… ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ mmm...beautiful and reminds me of what yet is to come here where I live. No snow or ice yet, which probably means when it hits, it will be harsh. Well done you sunny person you...  |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
This is my second read, Lovely Sun, and it's even better than the first. ~tier |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
amazing pic and write. hugging you for this. Chrislane ~The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze~ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
This is a  Beautiful! ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
I am so thankful for those special times that remain frozen until their perfect season when in warmth they can be released and shared with others. Your poem inspired me to look at pondering in a much different light that's much more special. Thank you for sharing. -Bob |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I loved the picture, the poem and I loved Bob's response, amen. Swoosh---> |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Another wonderful read. :-) |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
“for its life, oh, so short… and we wonder, are we better with sharp crystallized edges of snow, or more welcome even as drops of iced rain, encompassing moments that we would hold to, forever; for they are not, cannot be reformed into snowballs of flight to hurt, or even in play, build castles; no that is what cannot be done…not with iced rain not when we are iced in time…. all we might do, is hold our moment and magnify our wise.” Such a wise person, and excellent poet. JL |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
You are at your finest here. Eric |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Looks like you had the same kind of weather we had here. The streets were so icy, you didn't dare get out. But, there is some good news, today. It's gone, now! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
all we might do, is hold our moment and magnify our wise. and you have painted such a beautiful picture alike...to the picture you have captured... Incredible you are! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
If you're unlucky and Bill Clinton bites your lip, get it iced in time.... ....gack....sorry..... ....my only excuse is that this is my second entry, and the first sounded bleak...smartass beats bleak any day! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
OK, lady Sunshine who write of ice and snow so warmly  into my library, perhaps...my new favorite from your pen. Dang, IWIHWT! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Me too, sissie K...IWIHWT!!!  |
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