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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-01-02 08:19 AM



you spoke of lonely
how the windows feel
on your skin when you are there
bare on the glass
trying to make a man
open your door
and enter quickly
and stay awhile too

I had my hand over my ears
as I sat on the curb
and shook change in my pockets
wanting to use the phone
but not knowing the numbers
to your emergency
so I read your lips
when you said those words

and left the lights on too
so I could read the rest of you
even the small print
about a warrenty
and restocking fees
if I returned you
unopened or broken
and I wanted to break you

but you said you were too fragile
_____________

Dark

© Copyright 2005 ┬ęDark 2k - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2005-01-02 08:22 AM


You enter the new year
with sensitivity...

and you wear it well.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
2 posted 2005-01-02 08:51 AM


brake me instead
i'm ready to serve you master  
we can have her sit and watch us

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (01-02-2005 10:52 AM).]

SEA
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Member Seraphic
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with you
3 posted 2005-01-02 10:32 AM


I really like this one
Susan
Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
4 posted 2005-01-02 10:58 AM


I love the heart behind this, and the depth- and the wanting and the being there - you are a beautiful soul-

I liked the ending too - and must admit to a chuckle over the restocking fees-

Morning D- a great way to start the day, wrapped in your words -

  Susan

Every action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love

babygirlwlove
Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180
New York City
5 posted 2005-01-02 11:25 AM


always a thrill, darkie...always..

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
6 posted 2005-01-02 08:05 PM


I think I like this one best of all...

shows a "certain" side of you that touches

M

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

7 posted 2005-01-02 08:13 PM


Yes

Dave

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
8 posted 2005-01-03 05:27 AM


tender you
vandana
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since 1999-10-22
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USA
9 posted 2005-01-03 10:33 AM


nicely written
BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
10 posted 2005-01-03 12:29 PM


wanting to use the phone
but not knowing the numbers
to your emergency
so I read your lips
when you said those words

and left the lights on too

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Enjoyed this peek out of the corner of your eyes, DS~

A most fragile pondering, and then some.
  

*Alli4000*
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since 2004-03-21
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The World of Poetry
11 posted 2005-01-03 06:58 PM


Love this!!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

Elan
Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382
State of Wide Eye
12 posted 2005-01-03 07:00 PM


but you said you were too fragile

***

To a man
who listens,
cheers
to you!

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