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seasoned greeting |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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There was nothing that I wanted nothing I could place on tongue so I stood there in the rain wondering how to explain my presence there upon your steps knocking in a puddle of oh-save-me-from-myself and please grant me guise of dignity and hide that look of pure dismay finding me this way (again) and lie to me, lie pretty lines tell me that you're pleased to see me how I still think of you and smile at me in welcoming then hug me hard through my pretense and tell me "oh-you-must-be-cold" as you hustle me inside and out of my wet clothes - opening the wine I'd brought as you towel dry my hair as I sip the succulence sitting there between your legs naked warming wet... But I saw the candles lit I saw that she looked curious smiling sympathy at me when you opened up your door. "I was in the neighborhood..." (I saw her eyes--she understood-- and dammit she felt bad for me) I'm-sorry-I-did-this-to-you I telegraphed into your eyes, as you stood there silently nodding your goodbye. "Don't go..." she said, (too kind to me) "It's raining and..." she was so sweet although you looked alarmed I caught the signal of "no-you-should-not" I'm glad that you have her. "Merry Christmas!" and I smiled. "I wanted you to have this wine-- I see it is a timely gift." I kissed his cheek and waved goodbye to her as she smiled too sad as I gave the festive-wrapped bottle of our French merlot tied with my thong in a bow thinking "I'll buy Hennessy" on my way back home. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Sigh! This was touching. Loved it...but it took my words away. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 Try another day, okay?  As you said yourself some things can just weigh you down. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I'd say it's just as well my witchywoman friend. Pick up the other beverage on the way home, and I'll raise a glass with ya !!  hugs, Chrislane Happy New Year Karen!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Pulling my heartstrings with this great write. Ouch. Happier New Year, Karen.  .......jo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
It IS a great write. Cheers! m'witch and a hug |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 gawd Ktouching piece |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
yummy stuff Karen... how you take one emotion and surround it with an entire story blows me away...  love ya."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity The fencing of symbols was a pleasure to read. Like seeing the ripple and seeing the deed. But it struck me as odd to see such dense sitting atop such a delicate fence. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow...this brought back a moment from a quarter century ago... so smile, honey...you're never alone... |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This is a classic scene, and so well told! It is a pleasure to read! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
""Merry Christmas!" and I smiled. "I wanted you to have this wine-- I see it is a timely gift." I kissed his cheek and waved goodbye to her as she smiled too sad as I gave the festive-wrapped bottle of our French merlot tied with my thong in a bow thinking "I'll buy Hennessy" on my way back home." My gawd Karen...such an ache of a write!! Happy New Year Ser. Love ya lady~ In the midst of winter, |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wonderfuly written! Eric |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks for reading good poet people. And just a word of advice? If y'wanna take a stroll around the holidays, don't turn down Memory Lane. sighs and hugs  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
c'mere you, for your new year's hug 'n someday, let's sit with a giant bottle of merlot AND hennesey AND maybe tequila or rum or whatever helps wash away this scene (too real) I felt the chill when you walked away... and even worse yet, I felt her eyes on my back |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
you really know how to pour a girls glass of wine kindly, to you my sister amelia |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I didn't just read this... I felt it. Powerful and excellent! *S* |
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