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Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2004-12-29 01:43 PM

I like
watching you think,...
giving those cells of yours
value.

In harsh light,
pondering a poem,
those of your face,
suffused with years of thinking,
soften the glare.

Because
in bed,
naked as crabs
outside our shells,...
I like that it takes
such simple keys

to open a world where the sky is blue

and roses
bloom all year.

Elan
Member

since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

1 posted 2004-12-29 02:02 PM

And I am liking this one
very much...

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2004-12-29 02:07 PM

very nice, John~~

M

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

3 posted 2004-12-29 02:22 PM

enjoyed!

~tier

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-12-29 02:52 PM

Beautiful thought...absolutely beautiful.

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

5 posted 2004-12-29 04:02 PM

good write as always.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

6 posted 2004-12-29 06:44 PM

Diddo to what DreamChild said...I love this!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2004-12-29 11:09 PM

awesome, as usual

TexUS
Member

since 2003-03-20

Posts 228

8 posted 2004-12-30 01:25 AM

oh-so-lovely!

Great work.

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

9 posted 2004-12-30 07:58 AM

This is lovely, Huan Yi. Very restful yet oh so colorful.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

10 posted 2004-12-30 01:36 PM

yes.

this is so sensual and loving.

well done John.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

11 posted 2004-12-30 08:18 PM

beautiful

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

12 posted 2004-12-30 09:32 PM

Intresting

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

13 posted 2004-12-31 07:58 AM

This is superb... I like very much! *S*

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

14 posted 2007-04-28 06:29 PM

(one of the best.  you wrote so wonderfully.
be careful the eyes...tree has many eyes, some may belong to human or ? )

I like
watching you think,...
giving those cells of yours
value..... (I love the expression of gift.)

In harsh light,
pondering a poem,
those of your face,
suffused with years of thinking,
soften the glare.
( harsh/soften... the inter-reaction of light of Bulb and light of thinking)

Because
in bed,
naked as crabs
outside our shells,...
I like that it takes
such simple keys....
(I like that you mentioned this in a very casual way...in fact it is the simple cells's work to sense a blue sky and to imagine a rose blooming year arround...in CA it is. In Il it is not. and how perfectly use the word of KEY then OPEN..so poetically express the view of a poet.

to open a world where the sky is blue

and roses
bloom all year.

(wonderful, sooooo beautiful)

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