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could be Eden |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal 
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were I free . . . to give the whole of me – the depth of me – I’d love you so that you would never know another woman ever existed perhaps . . . I am nuts that’s my fissures showing my tears and torn flowing . . . but sewn whole I’d never let you go and you would believe . . . in Eden yet, I am where I am by choice I wear these bonds fettered yet . . . free from the guilt of the torn in me s.a.t. Every action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Some would rather simply believe in Eve... than in Eden... we've all tasted the apple and been cast out of paradise... but cast out in good company I would say... a very nice piece of work ma'am... indeed |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
and then you write a poem about handcuffs too damn the unsaid is lovely said enjoyed it ms suzz |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you both - you warm my heart with a smile - Hugs - Susan Every action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yet, I am where I am by choice I wear these bonds fettered yet . . . free from the guilt of the torn in me no no, go for the fun; (just don't get caught - i'll give you some tips) life's short, i think  |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
Oh wow... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Susan, oh how well I understand this one. Perfectly threaded together!  ....jo |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you for your replies my friends - and for your kindness - Inkked one - if only I could - but alas - it is not the make of me - but thanks for the offer  Hugs all - Susan Every action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
So sad. Heart-wrenching! But excellent. JL |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"and you would believe . . . in Eden" Beautiful line. I was in the place you speak of once upon a time...bonds can be broken..at the right time.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sometimes giving everything still isn't enough... but how beautifully you write the wish! *S* |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you so much, my friends - for understanding and for your warmth - Susan |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Sad yet amazing write Susan! ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, Susan! This is so very touching. Eden can manifest in your heart N0W ... there is no other way to experience it I think. Because in a relationship we actually get never enough! Beautiful write. Hugs. Margherita |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You could be free...James |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thanks Alli - hugs Margherita - yes - Eden must be created within, but it always helps to have someone to share it with - thanks dear James - could do and should do - they are not always the same - sometimes love means sacrificing what one could do for what one should do - thanks for your reply Hugs all - Susan Every action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love |
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