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behind the waves of dawn |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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there’s no room in a bedroom that reeks of ugliness it’s such a waste to weep behind doors behind the waves of dawn but someday i’ll leave this sea and take my conch shell face with me full of salt and sand just a flaring lip of a sea cow full of sea grass and bullshit i am without sails and the wind passes over with the moon another day goes by, and i’m a mouth full of storms into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
"i am without sails" perhaps, but yanno? When those sails are full again, you wont be able to keep the winds from carrying you on m'dear. Incredible right hon. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
strong words and images.... convey harsh feelings.... hugs ma'am... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
The things that hurt worst, bring out our best poetry....I know it does in me. But gee whiz I do hope this changes -- I'd sack the beautiful verse in a heartbeat for that. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I just go to the garage and fire up the black itch and let the music live on a highway with no fences kewl write |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
This feels like a slap in the face for not having read you in a while. I've learnt my lesson!  I love the hard hitting, straightforwardness of this. It has bite, and more. missed you, hope you are well. x |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Interesting choice of words here that stirred up some strange and unusual imagery in my mind... especially, the sea cow with flaring lip full of bullshit. That image really stuck with me. Again, very inspirational writing. If you have a chance to read, I wrote a Sonnet about "The Lighthouse by the Sea" which was inspired by your series about the Lighthouse. Hope you read and enjoy. -Bob |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maree, I was thinking of the image from those sames words Bob mentioned. They brought quite a picture to my mind.....like one person mooning another one or something. HaHa!! And, those as well as the rest of your poem, made me think of someone arguing and trying to make things right, then feeling bad about what they had said? I may be totally wrong, but if I'm right, I hope that things get better in the situation. Hugs to you, Sweetie,    |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
may the ship of loving fill your sails and may you always carry on when dark of night fills you with wails may you always sense the dawn although right now it's ash and rue may brand new days come just for you. Wow! Marie it's not often a poem blows me away, but yours did. It holds such a feeling of desperation and despair that I could taste the salt and sand. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Speechless...Maree, you render me speechless time and time again. Wow...Just wow! In the midst of winter, |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
and the wind passes over with the moon another day goes by, and i’m a mouth full of storms well then just let it rain sister poet let it rain |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow....  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A waste of weep, indeed. Damned nice writing. Though, I'm not sure I like you wearing this particular face. Hugs, Darksis |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree "but someday i’ll leave this sea and take my conch shell face with me full of salt and sand just a flaring lip of a sea cow full of sea grass and bullshit" I wish that I could write with the raw vision that you do. |
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