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Neigh, Go |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Neigh, Go She felt her muscles shiver with a yearning, struggled to restrain the need, the desire to race she heard windsong from the plains, what few birds remained on a cool winter’s morn singing against icy breezes all calling her to come but she mentally stamped, tamped the fires burning quelling the qualm of inner yearnings and thoughts raced back to the time when beneath her thighs the mare had quivered; her hand, taut on the reins, barely restraining her mount but mentally, they shared the basic must hand moved slightly, giving rein, a slight tap of heel and lowering in, whispered, go flight coming none too soon…. the mare voyaged her dreams until all were outrun, their mutual needs exhausted, their pairing compleat ~*~ she thought of the mare, some decades gone, felt her muscles shiver with a yearning, heard windsong from the plains, all calling her to come and she heard again the mare neigh, go |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"she thought of the mare, some decades gone, felt her muscles shiver with a yearning, heard windsong from the plains, all calling her to come and she heard again the mare neigh, go" Smiling at you... loved this write. Sometimes we just know when it's time. Hugs pretty lady~ In the midst of winter, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*smile* so full of...meaning. you did this very well.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
What to say, what to say.....perfect envelope, images that enthrall, tension and release in all three levels of meaning, and the details of one don't interfere with the others..... Go cowgirl! I like this very much! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
How do you resist? This yearning is so powerfully and enchantingly expressed! The mare from somewhere out there surely hears you.... Love, Margherita  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I've just seen flashes of visions of them running wild and free... dang lady, you make me miss the one I grew up with!! well done.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
horsing around a bit? always a treat to see where you take the reader enjoyed it ms |
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Fagin Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 126Ca |
A very telling write, sis |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Such tales you tell with meaning hiding behind very line. Well done!! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
The imagery in your poem is Great, but even more, I Love your deep imbedded inner passion expressed here for the race and as I'm reflecting on my own life, yes, there have been times when I, also, so caught-up in the moment, have actually heard myself speak audibly. (Smiles) Anyway, you helped me understand a bit better why I talk to myself... -Bob |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I found this to be a dreamy and an enchanting read. You need to go to her Kari. Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Very nicely written...i love this! ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea/sissie I felt much inner tension in this....enough to cause a stampede.  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
It goes without saying… B E A U T I F U L! Perfection in writing is tough, well… not for you. If the bell, as it were, can be rung… You rang it with this one. Have a great New Year! JL |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"barely restraining her mount" I really liked that part.  *giggle* (hey, you teased me first) neener neener hugs |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it's good to read you before I go |
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