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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Cheek by Jowl You don’t need Cockerels in an early morning Mother calling Daughter calling Son Daughter up and working Son up and bullied to get out to work Money comes from outside Don’t Forget it World knows it’s place Life knows it’s place All moves on the vellum Master Jacobs always said Move the words with a comma In the wrong place And the world moves To a pen that needs cleaning |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Awesome write Dave...your mind moves in incredible ways. And your pen follows. Eric |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome last verse there! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Very well written - I enjoy seeing with a different view this world of ours - I enjoy reading your take on things - your unique eyes  Susan |
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Catrina Member
since 2004-11-10
Posts 132 |
This, a unique vellum inking... Excellent, Sir. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Awesome Dave... ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Cheek by Jowl You don’t need Cockerels in an early morning Eric Most of the words I write I like, but people always seem to prefer stuff that is raw. I write a poem, blend it, spend lives on it, and someone says "they like the first two lines and the last two". Thanks for your comments, mate. At some point I will understand what people want. Until then I will just have to write. Dave passing shadows Think you are being a little too kind here. Thanks, just the same. Dave Susan Thank you Dave Catrina Thank you Catrina. Dave Alli Thanks. The one great kick for me was I punched in some starting lines of one poem and Google pointed them to my site. It made 8 hours work, worth it, for the words that are on there. Dave |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
OH AMEN!!!! I sometimes think I'm the only one....but I'm not! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
“Money comes from outside Don’t Forget it” Yep! Which reminds me… I better get to work here! Good one DavePage JL |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very enjoyable...David, your mind is most definately an asset to the rest of you, and your writings are no exception....don't worry about what anyone wants...just write...who you are and what your thinking and we'll continue to enjoy and thirst for the meanings.... Hugs |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
And the world moves To a pen that needs cleaning Well said. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Thanks everyone but I need to take a break. Writing might seem easy for me, but it isn't. I have to reach inside and drag out stuff remembering what I've, done, thought and I am not a natural writer. I was eight and I still couldn't read or write although the mental arithmetic was good. Even now my handwriting is virtually un-readable but I can at least touch-type. Thanks once again Dave |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good write |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Thanks Vandana Dave |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes another good one |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Marsha Thanks a lot. Dave |
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