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Waiting for the Ease Off
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Waiting for the Ease Off |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I’ve been waiting for the ease off of what, you ask Let me count no, not the ways but the days yes the days One is the bite of something growing not a good bright flower no a blight that stings as if knowing where the vulnerable place is a notion saying just wait a minute then take a portion Oh, it takes so long to know what what is the itinerary, the final destination? we all know what comes after life but what comes after this day? This strife of waiting for the better is dreaming me in bad and that’s the matter Tell me how to compensate for things lost the color of the way it looked before is gone and I am heavy breathing and undigested time even speaking in a loud voice with rhyme Take me bitter out of the cold of winter chill and let me feel for sure the morning of next summer only still stay quiet in the swing and see again the quiet bare feet of him and me |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
we all know what comes after life but what comes after this day? How poignant this is! We know we have to take it one day at a time... but what's to get us through that day... biting off tiny pieces doesn't lessen the mammoth proportions of the whole. Excellent write! I hope you find respite... in a way that leaves a warmth no cold wind can diminish. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
standing in line to hug you, behind our friend Ruth... damn I wish we lived closer.  |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
Wow, this is very powerful...and touches so deeply. Amazing write. Best wishes to you  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Standing in the "hug line" Martie, with open arms. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Martie, I was deeply touched by your writing. The last two stanza's were particularly meaningful to me. My heart can feel your ache.  I hope your holiday brightens........jo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Take me bitter out of the cold of winter chill and let me feel for sure the morning of next summer" listen for my brother the Crow he may turn your thoughts toward sunshine and help you dream again. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Tell me how to compensate for things lost... ~*~ I can tell you what is lost to me right now... warmth. It's 8 degrees today... so in many ways... I feel several degrees of cold... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Tell me how to compensate for things lost the color of the way it looked before is gone ....the tears in this....I feel for you, Martie. I know the truth of these lines, and all the rest of this beautiful exercise in sadness. Sometimes there is no compensation, we just go on without that which isn't ours anymore, and learn to make our world out of what is left to us. I know this well. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Martie .... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tell me how to compensate for things lost the color of the way it looked before is gone and I am heavy breathing and undigested time even speaking in a loud voice with rhyme ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ... ...  |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Such elegant phrasing you've chosen, Martie. I greatly enjoyed this. Hugs Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
sometimes even though we see the bite coming it still surprises us..and hurts. I have no answers. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow.  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
your yearning states so well what often we all hold - you write it so well - wishing we knew - Paul |
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