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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2004-12-18 07:21 AM



you said you would wear the gauze there
at our hedenism eden
where the sun would know our names
from hearing us shout above
the sea voice loud

and you would wear my eyes there
at our mountain retreat
where the foot prints in snow
went in circles around
to our bungalow again

and you would wear my thoughts too
at our cove of dreams
down at malibu
under the cliffs on vista beach
where only lovers are allowed

and you would wear my saliva
on your lips there on vine
and the corner of hollywood
at noon when the crowds came
just to see our love live

you said you would just wear me.... out
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dark

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-12-18 07:26 AM


nice
Sunshine
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2 posted 2004-12-18 07:45 AM



Reminds me of a McKuen poem...

only better...

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2004-12-18 09:31 AM


Oooh yes...
beautiful picture.
much enjoyed D..
and good morning.

SEA
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4 posted 2004-12-18 09:52 AM


"you said you would just wear me.... out"


Susan
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5 posted 2004-12-18 12:53 PM


Warm chuckle and sinful delights here - mmmmmm D - you paint a seductive picture -

Like SEA says -

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

inkedgoddess
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6 posted 2004-12-18 01:14 PM


and you would wear my saliva
on your lips there on vine
and the corner of hollywood
at noon when the crowds came
just to see our love live

you give just so much, then make us do a double take, like in lyrics we thought we heard, but did'nt or did we?
well anyhow,  youre guilty of always being one toke over the line , or is it one toke under the line???????
well have a toke on me, either way
or should i  have one on you?

*Alli4000*
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7 posted 2004-12-18 11:11 PM


Dark,Very nice write! Enjoyed this very much!!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

LeeJ
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8 posted 2004-12-21 07:22 AM


McKuen couldn't have said it better....or done it with such...shall we say...vigor...(wink)
Smiles and hugs...enjoyed

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