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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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there is wind today the kind that would move you when you stood next to me and held your hair with your married hand perhaps you would pretend it was stronger to see if I would be there to pretend you were falling just long enough to know your fit to me and perhaps you would smile and say excuse me and just linger a while waiting for me to say it was my pleasure as we both looked at windows and the dancers there looking for the right music to put us on the other side where the wind was our breathing ________________ Dark |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
sigh... when you write like this...  all I can do is sigh... Good morning D. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
perhaps you would pretend it was stronger to see if I would be there to pretend you were falling just long enough sometimes people do this without realizing what they are doing.... but in the end, my dear friend, all will indeed work out... I've learned through you, a lot...thank you Who Ever you are, DS...big smiles...and hugs you've taught me much....thank you |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now this is the soft side of dark... with dawn peeking in... |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
nice and dreamy |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Mmmmm - nice breeeze brushing 'cross the skin this morning D - lovely indeed -  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
"it was my pleasure as we both looked at windows and the dancers there looking for the right music to put us on the other side" Now that was moving to the point of a couple of reads, loved this one - loved it! It made me take a finger and draw on the misted window beside me, honest! |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
He knew how futile it was to hold back hair styled by Santa Ana hands, his bandana, a testament to that. But his ocean eyes watched anyway as tangled strands lashed her face in a way that silently pleased him. Felt that wind, DS. Lovely to read you. Indigo |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
to each of you you bless me with your smiles I thank for your days and eyes ms indy a stranger returns from rincon I know her eyes at the windows they are the storms that make palms taller nice treat to see you....happy holidays |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS I love the Santa Ana Winds...you write them with personal best.  |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
awesome stuff!!! i loved it! Merry Christmas! LOR you're the only one keeping me alive |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Clean and clear as the Santa Ana wind....you bring things into such sharp focus, with so few words. Reading this, I could see every detail, even some that aren't there, but might have been. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*floating* yes...sigh |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
when you stood next to me and held your hair with your married hand perhaps you would pretend it was stronger to see if I would be there What a powerful suggestion you've written... excellent work! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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