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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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Remembering the way you died, resting on your bed at home... You were in my arms and then, I was all alone. But it seems like just a minute, just a second, could have passed. So it makes me feel crazy when I think about the past. Still, I get lost inside your stories, when you'd hold me on your knee comparing all the recent times with what they used to be. You were everything I lived for, and I know, I'm just a child, but I miss the way you spoke and the way you always smiled. Now it doesn't make much sense, but I'm trying to get things right. And I only wish remembering could help me through the night. He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. [This message has been edited by GG (12-15-2004 10:34 AM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Good Morning  You know, I've learned something quit important...no matter how old we are, we are always still trying to get it right...smiles and hugs...your a marvelous written, evoking many thoughts... Thank you for writing and sharing. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Alyssa I felt this one. You have such a way with words gal. Hugs. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Alyssa, you penned the feeling precisely and I certainly don't have the answer..  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I understand the missing - and the ache in this - all too well SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a beautiful title! *S* And how well I understand this... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my...I know this ache... felt it again reading this exquisite piece. Heart hugs~ |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Alyssa, She must have been very special. I bet she'd be very proud to know how well you turned out! You've expressed yourself wonderfully in this poem. cathy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you are growing so beautifully in your writing ...sending angel hugs your way... |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
These words help ease a long felt ache, the ache of someone gone...in very human terms, that are easy to share... ___________ice/ford ><> |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Alyssa, sweet one, the title was perfect for this poem. As sometimes, when it rains, I miss my love ones passed. I understand these feelings well and send hugs your way.  ........jo |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
LeeJ, I suppose you're right. And I guess we never really do, either. Occassionally we run on to something that works out though. Hope something like that comes soon  Thanks for your read and reply!Gentle Spirit, I'm honored that this touched you. Really it was just a simple spill of emotion and memories. Thanks for being so generous  Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Susan C, unfortunately, I don't think there's anyone who does. Thanks for the reply Susan, and I'm sorry that you do understand it... because I know it hurts. But it's nice not to face it alone. Thank you. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Suthern, I was a bit hesitant because I felt the title didn't seem to have much to do with the poem. But thank you, I'm glad it worked and was liked. Thank you, and how I wish you didn't have to understand... Enchantress, far too many know it. I so wish they didn't, though. Thank you for the kind words you always offer and I do hope the ache lessens for you. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Cathy, Thank you... and yes, she was quite special. Unfortunately, no, she wouldn't have been proud of how I turned out. Though everything I thought of her was wonderful, and though I lived as if she was my God... when I died I not only had to mourn the loss of her, but the loss of who I thought she was, as well. That doesn't make my love for her any less, though. Again, thanks for the reply. You're always the sweetest Take care...Dix, What a kind reply. Thanks so much dear lady. back-atcha.Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
ice, wow, thank you... that is exactly what I was trying to do. I'm honored that you think I accomplished that. Thank you! Jo, you sure pulled this up from the dust. Thanks (Reminded me I needed to write replies, too!). I'm glad you like the title and can understand it... I figured no one would. But you do have a way of going beyond expectation, don't you? I hope the rainy nights ahead come and go as they should, and that you keep finding the strength to face them. Again, Thank you...Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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