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ice
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0 posted 2004-12-14 11:21 AM


When you open this poem
And your eyes begin
To turn these words
Into silent sounds,
Linking dots to dots
Until your brainwaves
Show an outline of a scene;  
Know each word here
Written, also forms
The outline of me.
*
And realize, as your eyes
Touch each line..we become
Intimate... that this leaf,
Is a private paragraph;
In a tome of untold secrets.

As your vision, changes letters
Into words, that form these lines;
Note the crudeness they expose;
Look close! for in them you will find
The failures of man kind.  

At first my lines are shed
Dark and menstrual,
Stains on a paper, blurs
Of what I have seen. Baskets
Of eggs, (Ovaries once viable)
Left unfertilized, passing
Though the end of my pen;
Barely comprehensible...
Rorschach bloodspots on a pad
...half white, half red.  

So as I write I ask...

Like Arthur's knights,
*"Who is this, what is here"
And like to them
A vision clears;
The Lady of Shalott appears,
To clean the clots and waste;
And from my verse, the smears...

She is pregnant with words
And wild with contractions,
But she deletes before
She dilates--we hold hands;
And then she pushes to give birth
To a beautiful, poem-child.

So note that any graces,
In these scribbles
On this page is,
Placed here by her hand
And any praises,
That you send, direct them
To the lady in the boat.


*"Who is this, what is here"
Alfred Tennyson-"The Lady of Shallot"



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GG
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1 posted 2004-12-14 11:31 AM


I love this.
The way it pulls me through, telling me, showing me exactly where it's from, what it could be, what it is. And does so honeslty.

Well done.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

Catrina
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2 posted 2004-12-14 11:42 AM


quote:
And then she pushes to give birth
To a beautiful, poem-child.


But not without the help of man...

thank you for this lovely, Ford.

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3 posted 2004-12-14 11:44 AM


I love this poem. and, is this the picture?
I love it too.....
Hugs,
Ethel

Martie
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4 posted 2004-12-14 11:54 AM


Ford

This has got to be one of my favorites of yours....the atmosphere just blooms with your words, until it is a part of me and I want to give birth too!  

Enchantress
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5 posted 2004-12-14 01:11 PM


A most beautiful write Ford..
I sit here speechless..this is wonderful.
This is poetry!!
Hugs~Nancy

     Season's Greetings!

froggy
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6 posted 2004-12-14 02:02 PM


Ford,
This is totally beautiful.
The feelings you put forth are priceless.

:-)

Within this heart you'll find love

LeeJ
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7 posted 2004-12-14 02:11 PM


Ford, I believe this is the most unique writting I have ever witnessed...incredible and very much enjoyed.
ice
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8 posted 2004-12-14 05:25 PM


­Her spirit comes to visit me
When I tire of the real;
"Half sick of the shadows"
That some solid in my daily life revealed.

A Lord once versed her, phantom wise
"A gleaming shape she floated by"
And on first reading of his poem,
I realized, my muse, a man, was not..
But it was she,
The lovely Lady Of Shalott


­GG
"And does so honestly."
That is a beautiful compliment,
Thank you...

Catrina
"But not without the help of man..."
Correct, and we are blessed that it is so...
Positive and negative charges make the world spin on its axis.
Thank you for your thoughts...

GarysGirl
I love that picture, it is exactly her, the one that visits me when I am stuck with writers block, or am writing crap.
Waterhouse painted several pictures of what he thought she looked like...but none to me are as beautiful as the one you posted...thank you

Martie
"the atmosphere just blooms with your words, until it is a part of me and I want to give birth too!"
Then the poem does exactly what it was intended to do...That rarely happens, I am flattered to an extreme.

Nancy
"This is poetry" I'll send that on to the lady in the boat...after I savor it a while, of course..lol
Thank You..

Ella
All good feelings I put forth are free to you, use them as you wish..
I am paid a great amount in pleasure by receiving these replies. Thank You

LeeJ
Your comment means a lot to me, especially considering how unique your own writing style is..
Thank You

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Come read to me some poem,
Some simple and heartfelt lay,
That shall soothe this restless feeling
And banish the thoughts of day.
Longfellow

[This message has been edited by ice (12-14-2004 08:50 PM).]

RSWells
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9 posted 2004-12-14 08:21 PM


Only honest poetry is intimate. This qualifies.
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10 posted 2004-12-14 08:28 PM


I like the image my brainwaves painted with this write.
Intimacy, dressed in passionate blue, revealing a bit of you.

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11 posted 2004-12-18 09:34 AM


gawd! how touching!
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12 posted 2004-12-18 02:44 PM


WoW....amazing write!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

Margherita
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13 posted 2004-12-18 05:01 PM


And realize, as your eyes
Touch each line..we become
Intimate... that this leaf,
Is a private paragraph;
In a tome of untold secrets.



A beautiful premise and promise!

Very powerful writing.

Love, Margherita

MGROVES
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14 posted 2006-08-22 12:22 PM


I am so glad I found this beauty-

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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