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| Open Poetry #34 |
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"Who is this, what is here" |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
When you open this poem And your eyes begin To turn these words Into silent sounds, Linking dots to dots Until your brainwaves Show an outline of a scene; Know each word here Written, also forms The outline of me. * And realize, as your eyes Touch each line..we become Intimate... that this leaf, Is a private paragraph; In a tome of untold secrets. As your vision, changes letters Into words, that form these lines; Note the crudeness they expose; Look close! for in them you will find The failures of man kind. At first my lines are shed Dark and menstrual, Stains on a paper, blurs Of what I have seen. Baskets Of eggs, (Ovaries once viable) Left unfertilized, passing Though the end of my pen; Barely comprehensible... Rorschach bloodspots on a pad ...half white, half red. So as I write I ask... Like Arthur's knights, *"Who is this, what is here" And like to them A vision clears; The Lady of Shalott appears, To clean the clots and waste; And from my verse, the smears... She is pregnant with words And wild with contractions, But she deletes before She dilates--we hold hands; And then she pushes to give birth To a beautiful, poem-child. So note that any graces, In these scribbles On this page is, Placed here by her hand And any praises, That you send, direct them To the lady in the boat. *"Who is this, what is here" Alfred Tennyson-"The Lady of Shallot" |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I love this. The way it pulls me through, telling me, showing me exactly where it's from, what it could be, what it is. And does so honeslty. Well done.  Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Catrina Member
since 2004-11-10
Posts 132 |
quote: But not without the help of man... thank you for this lovely, Ford. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I love this poem. and, is this the picture? I love it too..... Hugs, Ethel  |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ford This has got to be one of my favorites of yours....the atmosphere just blooms with your words, until it is a part of me and I want to give birth too!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A most beautiful write Ford.. I sit here speechless..this is wonderful. This is poetry!! Hugs~Nancy |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Ford, This is totally beautiful. The feelings you put forth are priceless. :-) Within this heart you'll find love |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Ford, I believe this is the most unique writting I have ever witnessed...incredible and very much enjoyed. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Her spirit comes to visit me When I tire of the real; "Half sick of the shadows" That some solid in my daily life revealed. A Lord once versed her, phantom wise "A gleaming shape she floated by" And on first reading of his poem, I realized, my muse, a man, was not.. But it was she, The lovely Lady Of Shalott GG "And does so honestly." That is a beautiful compliment, Thank you... Catrina "But not without the help of man..." Correct, and we are blessed that it is so... Positive and negative charges make the world spin on its axis. Thank you for your thoughts... GarysGirl I love that picture, it is exactly her, the one that visits me when I am stuck with writers block, or am writing crap. Waterhouse painted several pictures of what he thought she looked like...but none to me are as beautiful as the one you posted...thank you Martie "the atmosphere just blooms with your words, until it is a part of me and I want to give birth too!" Then the poem does exactly what it was intended to do...That rarely happens, I am flattered to an extreme. Nancy "This is poetry" I'll send that on to the lady in the boat...after I savor it a while, of course..lol Thank You.. Ella All good feelings I put forth are free to you, use them as you wish.. I am paid a great amount in pleasure by receiving these replies. Thank You LeeJ Your comment means a lot to me, especially considering how unique your own writing style is.. Thank You Come read to me some poem, Some simple and heartfelt lay, That shall soothe this restless feeling And banish the thoughts of day. Longfellow [This message has been edited by ice (12-14-2004 08:50 PM).] |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Only honest poetry is intimate. This qualifies. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I like the image my brainwaves painted with this write. Intimacy, dressed in passionate blue, revealing a bit of you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd! how touching! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
WoW....amazing write!  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
And realize, as your eyes Touch each line..we become Intimate... that this leaf, Is a private paragraph; In a tome of untold secrets. A beautiful premise and promise! Very powerful writing. Love, Margherita |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
I am so glad I found this beauty- My spirit will rise |
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