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We Flew - rewrite
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We Flew - rewrite |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
We Flew Echoing a fragment We flew against the wind Distilling a life wondered future We flew against the shore Twisting echoing ideas We flew torrents of life Making the sun rise We flew for evermore Echoing on the wind The sun shadowed in your shadow Moving earth to your feelings Understanding your vibrations Echoing twanging twitching Masked within control Taught through aeons You dance a tight rope Wire bound between two egos Quivering Disconnecting both ends We plummet To a scream of fire and heat And fear as gravity Exerts its pull On our minds To land Fulfilled As our spirits moving Really flew Against the tide |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
simply lovely! |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Thanks Lee Dave |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
On our minds To land Fulfilled As our spirits moving Really flew Against the tide Very nicely done Dave.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Dave...very much enjoyed! Hugs~Nancy |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Thanks. It is really to do with a clash of egos in a relationship. I re-read it and it does seem like something else. Maybe diplomacy is really just another way of making war but you only attack the canapes. regards Dave |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Understanding your vibrations" My favorite line. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Fighting the tides can be somewhat frustrating in a relationship ~ but it is never boring!   Linda |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I cut the last 8 lines off by accident. I knew something was wrong, I suppose I had looked at it too long and couldn't see it. I've put it here with the last 8 lines. Dave We Flew Echoing a fragment We flew against the wind Distilling a life wondered future We flew against the shore Twisting echoing ideas We flew torrents of life Making the sun rise We flew for evermore Echoing on the wind The sun shadowed in your shadow Moving earth to your feelings Understanding your vibrations Echoing twanging twitching Masked within control Taught through aeons You dance a tight rope Wire bound between two egos Quivering Disconnecting both ends We plummet To a scream of fire and heat And fear as gravity Exerts its pull On our minds To land Fulfilled As our spirits moving Really flew Against the tide We looked at walls of just stone We melted the candles of Rome We looked at eyes Can we concede We are We danced in the magic of bliss Music was your eyes kiss We danced alone |
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