Open Poetry #34 |
Raiment Of Dust |
babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Nights I fashion in a raiment of dust, braided from drumskins drawn taut against the soul, the insatiable mauling clocks cease their mothlike songs, and longing, the cock has at last hung its iridescent chant out to dry in the sun, gunmetal casks of dreams hum over the hollows of eternity, and the electric metaphor of your hands, quivering as the rain pours forth its bloodthirsty transparency grows thick in the dark body, beating the shrouded heart milks dahlia through its grating doubt, wading the depths of lucid mirrors, the subtle shape of breasts, elicit those secret sugars I harbor inbetween the drumskin of the clavicle as it beats pink nectar from the quicksilver fountains of desire, you have no use for, score the cocks fury, heavy in the core organ canes of sugar and delirium char the soul in a catechism of bronze, nights I fashion from drumskins drawn taut, spasm over the eyes as I bind them inside of the whispers and insomniac flowers of hyacinth in whose solemn flesh I'd reach a measure of forgetfulness, braided from this long, empty raiment of dust. The Valentine Series 2004 copyright baygirLPress Poetic Constellations **Intoxicant to the SouL** [This message has been edited by babygirlwlove (10-19-2004 08:34 PM).] |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
How can I respond to this but to say. BRAVO! You left me speechless...and that doesn't happen often. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!!! ......just WOW! ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
thanks for the love, guys...a true pleasure to be among you... **babygirL** |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Ahhh, I love it when a piece draws me from each line to the next. Doesn't happen to often, but this one was magnetic... Absolutely K O O L! jwesley |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
j~ thanks for stopping in on this... **babygirl** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Damn! |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
ooooooooooooooooooooo...I got a DAMN! from Mysteria..(Big Smile)....(((thank you)))! much love, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
the cock has at last hung its iridescent chant out to dry in the sun, gunmetal casks of dreams hum over the hollows of eternity, and the electric metaphor of your hands, quivering as the rain pours forth its bloodthirsty transparency grows thick in the dark body, beating the shrouded heart milks dahlia through its grating doubt, wading the depths of lucid mirrors, the subtle shape of breasts, elicit those secret sugars I harbor inbetween the drumskin of the clavicle as it beats pink nectar from the quicksilver fountains of desire, you have no use for, score the cocks fury, heavy in the core organ canes of sugar and delirium char the soul in a catechism of bronze, nights I fashion ok.. you get a damn from me as well.. Damn.... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
yeyyy...a Damn from Cpat.... lol...thank you, love... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
just sitting here with my jaw dropped, as usual sheesh . . . I DO envy your gift, in a most honorable fashion. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
littlewing... my gift is no greater than yours, love...thank you for all the love & encouragement...you know I feel it & it means the world to me... so much love, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
From the shadows of silence from one come the echoes of a thousand in furry. Very much loved the read and the way the images of emotion changed from light to dark and back in this piece. ohh, and a DANG as well. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
the emotions reign in strong with the use of the drumstick/beat metaphors, and I think its good you returned to this image several times...this is good stuff. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
In the desert I saw a creature, naked, bestial, who, squatting upon the ground, Held his heart in his hands, And ate of it. I said, "Is it good, friend?" "It is bitter -- bitter," he answered; "But I like it Because it is bitter, And because it is my heart." Stephen Crane |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Thank you all for stopping in on this... love&light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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