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~K~
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0 posted 2004-12-10 11:13 AM



The arrow
is loose
& drifting

in gravity's
playground
the sound
of her suffering

echos through
realities

trap door

with a bang
with a whimper
it's over
before it begins

It's over
again

& again she takes aim

& misses the sky.

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-12-10 12:44 PM


wow

well written

miscellanea
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2 posted 2004-12-10 03:41 PM


great write!  

       misc'e

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3 posted 2004-12-19 08:38 AM


maybe if her aim had been loose and drifting...diana would have nothing to lament....

but then again, most of us are just as full of contradictions as she is.....

to aim and miss the sky...then tell me, what does the arrow hit?

angele
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4 posted 2004-12-19 08:46 AM


love your style ! great write
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5 posted 2004-12-19 03:10 PM


Yes, I love your style too.  I wish I could write like you!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

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