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Open Poetry #34

Diana's Lament

~K~
Member

since 2004-07-27

Posts 148

0 posted 2004-12-10 11:13 AM

The arrow
is loose
& drifting

in gravity's
playground
the sound
of her suffering

echos through
realities

trap door

with a bang
with a whimper
it's over
before it begins

It's over
again

& again she takes aim

& misses the sky.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-12-10 12:44 PM

wow

well written

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

2 posted 2004-12-10 03:41 PM

great write!

misc'e

muted

Member Elite

since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

3 posted 2004-12-19 08:38 AM

maybe if her aim had been loose and drifting...diana would have nothing to lament....

but then again, most of us are just as full of contradictions as she is.....

to aim and miss the sky...then tell me, what does the arrow hit?

angele
Junior Member

since 2004-01-09

Posts 35
Malta (tiny island in the Med)

4 posted 2004-12-19 08:46 AM

love your style ! great write

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2004-12-19 03:10 PM

Yes, I love your style too. I wish I could write like you!

~Alli~

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