Open Poetry #34 |
As you write |
DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Poetry lives to Beg your skill While a picture lasts A newspapers headlines Describing your words for life Then reason why A gifted poet Could enlightened the world With visions A child could read To dance words on rain on a window pane Echoing captivity Eased by vision To understand Movement, flow, subjection, escape For the world’s loss For your words To be remembered Decorating a tapestry of images With vision everlasting As you write |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Liked this very much Dave. Almost analytical in presentation, yet the art is radiant in form and content. You done good. TD |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Dave You said it so well. I feel as though I escape into another world when I write and I love that feeling. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Thanks TD It was meant in a way to surgical but to capture just one way to look at something Dave |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Sue Your writing escapes a lot of people into another world when you write The world is made of what we see and clarity and honesty are often in very short supply Dave |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
powerful write here |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautiful! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
"As you write" .... there is a lot of power in it. Love, Margherita |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes you do write with very strong words yet you have such a kind heart |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
To dance words on rain on a window pane Echoing captivity Eased by vision To understand Movement, flow, subjection, escape ~*~ Excellent! |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Beautiful mix of language, image and feelings...~P |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
passing shadows Thanks Shadows Somehow I kept something that I wrote from kid days and the feeling was to escape from boredom but the rains came down and there was no-where to escape to. I hope kids have better opportunities. dave LeeJ Thanks Lee Dave Margherita I suppose I am not really interested in puting the gloss around when the raw words seem to want to write. It seems almost hypocrisy to dress up something that isn't. At one point I thought poetry was everything you wanted to do and it didn't matter what you did as "when everything was gone, someone would find a wall, and a message". Deep down I still feel that everyone has the right to be poetic as they wish but whilst I dont want them talk forms as a way of life, we'll fail because we now talk statistics and a drop out rate without understanding why they drop out. I raised with LeeJ that she might be a parallel thinker but with the current political structures we actually had an English Cabinet Minister telling us that if we dont agree with what Blair is doing on Gambling Casinos we are being un-American. Would you ever hear those words in your country. Dave MGROVES I never knowingly hurt anyone or anything. I avoid the vexatious and I do walk away rather my lose my temper but that is because we seem to have a world in which it has become the habit to attack those who don't do what they are told, or who refuse to agree with you. Dave Sunshine Many thanks Dave choshi Thank you Dave |
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