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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Fish in a glass through a window asks what a strange inviting world the watery one is just too comfortable So the fish grew external gills to live ashore, a contest of wills meant a break from past tradition to breath air now meant contradiction So some fish stayed, kept gills intact other sprang limbs from a body tract remained in water part of the day climbed marsh leaves the rest of their stay Creatures modified form and structure from a past cast, began a rupture the fish in the glass adopted gills with added limbs learned land skills So here we are free of the glass with acquired names, time does pass visitors from Mars notice no gills creatures on land in a contest of wills... [This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-09-2004 09:59 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
and here we are now fish, out of water interesting (r)evolutionary thoughts flowing |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
I must agree with Midnightsun on this one. Nice read Martin. :-) Within this heart you'll find love |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
yes here we are, nice read does your fire burn? can you hear me? ILL JUST KNOCK THIS WALL RIGHT DOWN |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Very good write!  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Thanks Midnite for an idea to add a final stanza...with a little evolutionary twist  |
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