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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2004-12-07 06:55 PM

Broken sentences lay scattered
From charred marrow lost when the howl of rage
Swept up the life inside
Leaving empty rows of stone to mark
Where shattered wings are set in mosaic of prose
Unable to find an end to the passage
   Or to fly easily upon the sky
With spread wings of hawk who cries

Hunger

  here they lie

half finished inside a wasteland
denied the breath of rain or feel of snow
soft on skin
        too warmed by driven flames

     I find too few clouds

and too much the pain in rising waves
that grace us with salty kisses
  tinged copper
as I bite my own lip
to once again taste the way it feels
to breathe lust into
                            my eyes

yet flakes fell
to cover white the scars
             left from rough gouge
of fingers clawing to hold
one more time
           to something lost once
and found inside
   blue flames that fall from lips
rushing through words
half spoken sighs

unwritten in it all lies
these glyphs of bones

and I am yet to decipher the meaning
   caught in symbols written
behind your eyes

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

1 posted 2004-12-07 07:03 PM

and I am yet to decipher the meaning
caught in symbols written
behind your eyes

who can these days?
ordinarily i would never christen one of yours, but this went down smooth as vermouth.

oops hope that didnt come out wrong.. i liked this , it spoke to me, and i didn't have to use the dictionary

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

2 posted 2004-12-07 07:10 PM

You have a writer's passionate way with words. Emotions expressed eloquently,Ron.

believe in what your heart feels...

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2004-12-07 07:47 PM

Oh, how you read my mind, this eve:

as I bite my own lip
to once again taste the way it feels
to breathe lust into
my eyes

your words always bring me this melancholy comfort, Ron. Makes me remember what I should be grateful for. Thank you.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-12-07 08:10 PM

Enjoyed the feel of this - and the stir of the words -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2004-12-07 09:20 PM

I see you are working late again..

but am glad you posted this.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2004-12-08 06:36 AM

yet flakes fell
to cover white the scars
             left from rough gouge
of fingers clawing to hold
one more time
           to something lost once
and found inside
   blue flames that fall from lips
rushing through words
half spoken sighs

~*~

SIGH

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

7 posted 2004-12-08 07:35 AM

so passionate Ron, so brilliantly described...I could see and feel the convex text

Incredible

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2004-12-08 07:40 AM

Broken sentences lay scattered
From charred marrow lost when the howl of rage
Swept up the life inside
Leaving empty rows of stone to mark
Where shattered wings are set in mosaic of prose
Unable to find an end to the passage
   Or to fly easily upon the sky
With spread wings of hawk who cries

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
     I find too few clouds

and too much the pain in rising waves
that grace us with salty kisses
  tinged copper
as I bite my own lip
to once again taste the way it feels
to breathe lust into
                            my eyes

yet flakes fell
to cover white the scars
             left from rough gouge
of fingers clawing to hold
one more time
           to something lost once
and found inside
   blue flames that fall from lips
rushing through words
half spoken sighs

unwritten in it all lies
these glyphs of bones

and I am yet to decipher the meaning
   caught in symbols written
behind your eyes
===============================
after reading these last two...I believe there isnt much you cant decipher nor define in poetry....
I dont know which is more impressive...the imagery, the personify and symbolism, or the depth of the emote...but I do know the culmination of all is profound poetry.

Where shattered wings are set in mosaic of prose
Unable to find an end to the passage
   Or to fly easily upon the sky

damn ....IWIHWT
moth anthem...

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2004-12-11 08:05 AM

I love the way your mind works, to give us poetry like this

Contabo
Member

since 2001-11-21

Posts 159

10 posted 2004-12-11 06:02 PM

If I may....my friend...

A most wonderful piece

Contabo

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2004-12-11 08:14 PM

A most excellent write Captain.
I don't know how this one slipped by me.
Very much enjoyed...as always.

A Tone of Voice
Member

since 2001-07-18

Posts 287

12 posted 2004-12-12 12:42 PM

what I like about poetry is the fact images can be conveyed in a way that goes beyond description---as you did. enjoyed!

ATOV~

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