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3:56 am and we have no names.
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3:56 am and we have no names. |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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the empty sugar packets by my spoon look like loneliness i look up from my coffee and you look up from yours like lightning and we jump. your feet hit the ground like a heartbeat as you move to my table it's 3:56 in the morning and i forget why i couldn't sleep but i'm here now "betty's all night diner" the waitress is sleeping at a table behind me you sit down the air is silent but there's no need to talk words would be complicated insted you drink your coffee and i drink mine and we breathe in the sleeping world it feels like were the only ones alive and then.. your hand is in mine and it feels like borrowed time this moment this moment that should last forever would never i knew that, you knew that but you're still holding my hand it feels like we own time and we have no names we aren't anything we just...are. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
cool My diner experiences at that hour were always bleary eyed and often concluded with a dine and dash. |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
very kul write  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
reminds me of some times at Waffle House |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Chelsea, that's a heart held in a hand moment. Don't you wish you could stop the clock, if only for one whole day? poignant write |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Chelsea, loved your words this morning with it comes a memory or two love this line: and we breathe in the sleeping world M |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Very nice Chelsea..  Enjoyed this...~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
You have a unique style whifch I enjoy Juju |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You slice life with a clean knife, Chelsea...a thin slice of cream cheese cake this is... and I love cream cheese cake |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
this moment that should last forever would never i knew that, you knew that but you're still holding my hand it feels like we own time I like this so very much. *S* Excellent write! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"it feels like we own time" yes That's it exactly. (love your title, too) |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
The title brought me in and I wasn't disappointed. I felt like I was there. Excellent... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I love it.. I know what you are talking about. Being the insomniac that I am, and the nearness of a 24 hour perkins, I could see this happening. ~Jen Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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