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the sea-wind screams her name
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the sea-wind screams her name |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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the sun hovers like a fat yellow blimp full of bursting and days in space it rings like a bell dripping gold onto my shoulders heavy as a drenched rag i dream of serenity how her silent warriors enter me like a stream, slow and spirituous bound for shadowy seas noisy enemies knock at her knees i scrape the edge of sand clutching sea-shells in my hands the sea-wind screams her name i am hushed full of waves and the blue fish that are her eyes into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Clean and good and memorable...as yours 'most always are......I'm glad I stopped here. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
the sea-wind screams her name i am hushed full of waves ~*~ Maree, I felt as if I had been viewing some artist's canvas full of color and heat...and cool...Van Gogh comes to mind for his extreme color... I don't know...this one needs to be marked as one of your best...you got so much across with so few words... I would borrow your brevity... Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
the sun hovers like a fat yellow blimp full of bursting and days in space it rings like a bell dripping gold onto my shoulders heavy as a drenched rag i dream of serenity Love the feelng of your words, Maree hugs M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you do please the soul |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i am hushed full of waves and the blue fish that are her eyes so much to sea you have mastered her in this offering to her majesty |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
i scrape the edge of sand clutching sea-shells in my hands the sea-wind screams her name i am hushed full of waves and the blue fish that are her eyes Excellent visuals...very much enjoyed! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree, sweet friend...you are so full of word treasure and poetic heart. Loved this!  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
a beautiful offering Maree, and as Kari said done so well with brevity. Hugs. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
blue fish swim in tears, my sweet maree  You are too kind to me lovie (but? thank you :blush)  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I think it would not be me to take your hand, but the wind maree... as usual ma'am... I leave humbled at reading you.. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
And sometimes, a word is worth a thousand pictures. Back to the top with you! This, is the good stuff! |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
You know I couldn't let this one get by. Your words are so vivid, raw, refreshing. Words typically fail me when reading your writes. They are intense, surreal, and flowing. I often read and wish I was able to incorporate your types of inspiration into meaninful poetry. You have a great gift that you gift to all of us. Thank you for you and your words. Kevin |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
dripping gold onto my shoulders what an awesome line . . . You, m'dear are all of the elements. combined. |
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