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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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Achilles a cavalry troop on bicycles clothespin warplanes on a string shooting marbles across the battlefield picket rifles and mud grenades |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a scene |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I remember these times...Boys, playing at something they need never know. Nicely done! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling...they made me be "the nurse." So guess who got in trouble for ripping up sheets for bandages and sneaking ketchup out of the fridge? mmmhmmm. A simpler time, and understood, now in retrospect, how that game was romanticized into something more palatable. Sometime I'll have to tell you about G.I. Joe on "leave." (Barbie always dumped Ken for him.) smile? |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ah- fun - playing war, we called it. We had a brick fort with a tunnel exit - and an acre of gardens and barns and pasture to plan our maneuvers around - great memories -  susanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
great write |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Strong writing and short, something to be envied and I have to echo Ed here, as well. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thanks Everyone John |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
whew! those were the days...i have four brothers and they let me play war games with them as long as our parents aren't at home...lovely poem, you have a knack for telling a lot with a few words |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
...and ashes ashes we all fall down. It was nice not understanding. Thank you for this write... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
oooo great imagery... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Yi The title is perfect... The content brings back memories,...My mainstream life of living with younger children is over, do kids still play at war games? Do kids play at anything at all, in a community way besides organized sports? I don't see groups of ten year olds organizing their own scenarios of life through play like I experienced in early life... We "played" at war games, yes, but that is why I am against war in my adult life....Yes, we played at cowboys and Indians, and the red devils always bit the dust...but that is why I am pagan follower today of many first nation spiritual customs... The short lines of this poem brought long lines of thought out of my mind.. enjoyed ---------ice ><> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
we play war when we kids, and when we're grown to. very well done! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Nice work on this! Especially loved the first two stanzas. Corinne |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I really enjoyed this.....Don't you wish this was what "war" was all about in real life?.... |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
how lovely a youth time but how deeply the war rooted. enjoyed as always. I have no idea why I missed those. |
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