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0 posted 2004-11-30 07:38 PM

Did you hear me?
I called out to you, I know..
So much unsaid, too much gone by..
I wish there had been more..

Remembering days past...
Summers were special times...
Lazy afternoons, me cleaning the pool
Cousins Aunts and friends would all swirl about..
The laughter was contagious..
I do miss yours..

You were a window into a world full of glamour
Revealing, yet warning..
And never once did you treat me as a boy...
But as a young man.

Headstrong, Sharp and Elegant...
You were all this and more....
I call out to you still..
And I'm glad you hear me.

In Loving Memory
Elizabeth M Givens
02-12-1912 11-26-04

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1 posted 2004-11-30 07:42 PM

"And never once did you treat me as a boy...
But as a young man."

It is important in growing, to have someone like this.  My condolances for your loss.  

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2 posted 2004-11-30 07:55 PM

A wonderful tribute to her.  She sounds like a great woman.  Hold onto her.  Rejoice in her life and her teachings to you.  Keep them near and she will remain with you always.  Your poem tugged at my heart.  I understand your feelings and you conveyed them well in the overall tone of your poem.  I really feel that you poured a great amount of time and energy into perfecting this poem and that is exactly what you accomplished.  It is a brilliant tribute...a proud eulogy of sorts.  I will be looking for more from you since your talent is obvious and should be appreciated.

Warm regards and condolences,


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3 posted 2004-11-30 08:00 PM

I doubt that any words I type can be of much comfort to you, but I did want to offer my condolences.

Elegantly eloquent, you had my heart at "hello", as in that first stanza, which indeed expresses the pain of wondering if our loved ones knew that we loved them...



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4 posted 2004-11-30 08:02 PM

A lovely expression of affection and rememberance - thank you for sharing - heart hugs to you -


Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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5 posted 2004-11-30 08:02 PM

Robert, you wrote a wonderful tribute to Grandmother in this reminds me of the poem that she wrote...simple, purposeful, and oh so full of love.

You never fail to amaze me...and I never fail to be full of pride over you.

Love, Sis

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6 posted 2004-11-30 08:10 PM

It appears to my eyes that a common bond
exists between a sister and brother...

Both having huge hearts with great love and
compassion,  both having sweet and precious
memories of those they love...

Both so in tune with their emotions and an
ability to share them so well...

You are both blessed...and so was she.

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7 posted 2004-11-30 08:22 PM

Time is made up of captured moments.

The things shared and the moments spent
will become gifts that the heart won't ever

My deepest sympathy to you Robert,
and your dear sister Karilea.


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8 posted 2004-11-30 10:11 PM

And never once did you treat me as a boy...
But as a young man.

A beautiful tribute to your Grandmother.

I'm sorry for your loss.


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9 posted 2004-12-01 05:50 AM

very touching~~


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10 posted 2004-12-01 08:11 AM

beautiful heart spill Robert, your words show how much inner beauty runs within your family and your heart.  Well done sir.
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11 posted 2004-12-01 08:28 AM

God bless gramdmothers. Excellent write.

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12 posted 2004-12-01 08:31 AM

My deepest condolences...

believe in what your heart feels...

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13 posted 2004-12-01 09:34 AM

This is a fine tribute to one who so touched your life.  In your heart and thoughts, she will live forever; that's not a bad legacy.  Well done. Ken

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14 posted 2004-12-01 01:18 PM

Thank you all for your kind words and thoughts... I am very new to this art and hope to grow.. many of you have helped me more that you know.. We do miss her very much, she was one of a kind

Robert Rilling

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15 posted 2006-02-05 08:59 PM

Rest in peace now Robert,
reunited this day with your grandmother.

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