Open Poetry #34 |
wet with grassed velocities ( lighthouse series scene 12 ) |
Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Days of dragonflies arrive so too legless bodies covered in sweat and bites mosquito’s grow fat with lust and I with envy My foundations snap with the slap of greed, his nocturnal creed and I am wrapped in his brine wet with grassed velocities I have tasted this many a night it clings to my spine and corrodes me strips me bare of salt I worship the cries the raw thrust of wide-hipped wives and friendless gentlemen that wind the core of funneled limbs. into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
:: smiling:: wow and damn.... and much more deserved than my own... hugs you... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
yanno? You just keep getting better and better... and I am SO enjoying this series... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree Whew! Don't you have a problem with West Nile Virus there? This is just so.....so.....raw...so you!! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Raw..certainly, excellent...you bet... A great write that can be felt easily in the gut...without a question. Well done. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
mindfilled mental moments... the ones that never reach the lips but live in sore hearts unspoken... dang, girl...you do them so well... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Maree, these are excellent!! I do hope the series never ends... you are SO good!! |
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angele Junior Member
since 2004-01-09
Posts 35Malta (tiny island in the Med) |
wow ! heavy hitting and raw....i love it |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
wow. impactful spill of words.... whew... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
love your way with your words.. you go into the depths and reach |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Let me add my awe. The more I read you, the more I want. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
This blew me away! ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
My turn to say "amazing". |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you everyone, for taking the time to read. You're comments are greatly appreciated. Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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