Open Poetry #34 |
Rather let me die |
Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
People speak of broken hearts not how long they take to part and restructure into dotted lines around the perimeter of blackened emptiness. Dot, space - dot, space, dot, through the spaces I am lost lonely in the company of white memories of the past meant to heal not suffer me an incomplete lifespan. Breathe! I cannot breathe in tunnels of my needs leading to a shallow mind unable to accommodate a disembodied soul disowned and floating free like shadows I perceive. I’m not equipped; how can it be questions too are free and float off into deaf ears of he who feels my needs. And yet amidst confusion two as one entwine snuggled up together in auras of the mind drawing up and giving out each one to the other unreserved pure pleasure only bodies can provide. Not enough and I decide rather let me die for deaf is heart’s desire to the word, “goodbye”. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
strongly written... emotive, and constructed around good imagery.... very nicely done ma'am... very nice |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Helen There is so much wonder in life, my friend...to prefer death makes me feel very sad for you. I wish you peace. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks Capt Hair for the read and for your response. Much appreciated. Martie - sometimes I just don't know so many things but somehow it seems important to record events. The feeling has passed for now. Thanks for the read. Look after yourself. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
I rather liked this. "Not enough and I decide rather let me die for deaf is heart’s desire to the word, “goodbye”." Good job of describing two magnets, their attraction and, at times aversion. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand this well what a write! always enjoy you! |
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