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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2004-11-19 09:38 PM

stars wet with sand

you are here, inside me
you do not scurry like the storm
i see in your eyes, no
you cast-out the shadowy leaves
the mid-night hours
to bring me sunrise and long syrupy
kisses in dreams

and the coming winter
does not know your name
as it does mine
for you were born of summer
a flight of doves in song

and i of mourning

and i can love you only
with the pull of setting sun
with stars wet with sand and
my eyes like autumn crumbling in leaf.

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (11-20-2004 12:31 AM).]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-11-19 09:39 PM

dang, I do love your style

stevebrklynnyc
Member

since 2004-01-04

Posts 292
GA, Camden

2 posted 2004-11-19 10:14 PM

I wish I thought of that last line. Thanks, I liked it muchly. Steve.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2004-11-19 10:14 PM

Who doesn't like her style?

Not I....I love it!

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (11-20-2004 06:12 AM).]

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2004-11-19 10:18 PM

Wow, Maree! Really do like this one!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2004-11-19 10:44 PM

Fantastic write Maree....love this!
Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me ~

~K~
Member

since 2004-07-27

Posts 148

6 posted 2004-11-20 02:38 AM

Gazing at the
epicenter
it never hurts
to be wearing
rose-colored
glasses
truth blinks
fiercely
dazzled by
it's own
reflection

your poem is
pure beauty.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2004-11-20 10:11 AM

DarkAngelGirlie~
This is beautiful~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

8 posted 2004-11-20 10:14 AM

"and i can love you only
with the pull of setting sun
with stars wet with sand and
my eyes like autumn crumbling in leaf."

I love reading you! SO awesome

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

9 posted 2004-11-20 03:07 PM

Woah! Enjoyed!!

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

10 posted 2004-11-20 03:42 PM

Wonderful poetry!
Enjoyed.

JL

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

11 posted 2004-11-20 05:10 PM

"my eyes like autumn crumbling in leaf."

Now that is luscious poetry.

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

12 posted 2004-11-20 05:23 PM

Beautiful, Maree, just BEAUTIFUL!!!
Huggers,

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

13 posted 2004-11-20 08:30 PM

quote:
and the coming winter
does not know your name

as poetic a phrase as you will find

(i once used the term 'you've never known winter'- I now ashamedly admit--lol)

Hugs

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

14 posted 2004-11-20 08:36 PM

and i can love you only
with the pull of setting sun
with stars wet with sand and
my eyes like autumn crumbling in leaf.

but what a way to love...if only for those moments

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

15 posted 2004-11-21 01:23 AM

Exactly!

Jason

Kevo
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since 2004-06-02

Posts 466
Navarro County, Texas, USA

16 posted 2004-11-21 02:57 AM

There is just something intangible yet unmistakable in your writing that speaks to me - many times softly, like a whisper. Perhaps its the soothing, sultry tone of your writes waltzing with unparalleled cinematic imagery that grips me firmly within your words and does not let go even after I've left the page. I don't remember the words. I can't memorize a thing, it seems. But the feeling I walk away with is a result of your inspiring gift of poetry. You are ever the shining star here. Beautiful writing. And, thanks for the sweet, inviting reply to my last post. Not my greatest but sometimes they just come out the way the come out, don't they? Thanks for this piece tonight.

It's good to be back in the mix with such gifted people.

Your poetic friend in awe...again,

Kevin

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

17 posted 2004-11-21 08:55 AM

you cast-out the shadowy leaves
the mid-night hours
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
and the coming winter
does not know your name
as it does mine
for you were born of summer
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

and i of mourning

and i can love you only
with the pull of setting sun
with stars wet with sand and
my eyes like autumn crumbling in leaf.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Girl...everytime I read you I find myself saying..IWIHWT!!!!
another awesome inspire...so many great lines, such perfect personifis and images...you write surreal sooooooo well.

"this medium is over taken by keyboard prophets who believe their every word profound."

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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

18 posted 2004-11-21 11:01 AM

and i can love you only
with the pull of setting sun
with stars wet with sand and
my eyes like autumn crumbling in leaf

one of the most lovely images

M

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

19 posted 2004-11-21 11:05 AM

what the moth said....

and I seriously doubt the opinion you hold of my own meager talent is justified ma'am.... one only has to read a few of the offering you place here and see where the true talent is..

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

20 posted 2004-11-21 03:05 PM

To read you is a leap into wonder ...

Excellent work.

Love, Margherita

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

21 posted 2004-11-21 05:01 PM

Superb, Maree.

Your writing is always a journey into kewl.

Billy 8)

Alicia
Member

since 2002-03-22

Posts 279

22 posted 2004-11-21 09:41 PM

oh so agreeing with the many other notes left,...just, beyond maree, you soar. ~a.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

23 posted 2004-11-22 07:15 PM

Thank you all for your kind replies and your support, please know that I appreciate them and you all so very much.

Maree

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

24 posted 2004-11-23 02:33 PM

dang Maree, I almost missed this beauty! Another incredible write from your pen m'friend!

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