Open Poetry #34 |
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A Cautionary Tale --- oooooh - spooky |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal ![]() |
It was a dark and stormy night No, really it was, not just a cliché’ The clouds hushed the full moon’s light Yet lightning bolts turned dark to day Wind wailed in tantrum with stomp of foot Trees cringed beneath its wrathful cry Held to ground with determined root Branches as arms, pleading unto sky The rain then came in slicing rush Turning earth to quick sand squish Rivers as eels across ground did gush And shadows lay heavy in sodden mist And there, in stealth, a darkness crept Hugging against lines of somber cover Creeping, sneaking, to where she slept Until by her side he then did hover What innocence upon this bed did lie What beauty and blush she did reveal And what a fitting night upon which to die And from her breath, a soul to steal A crash, a boom, a thunderous jolt Waking up the sleeping dead Startled eyes of wee yearling colt Beheld the draped and shadowed head A scream, a cry, a terror felt As bone stark smile she then beheld It was death that in those eyes did dwell A specter of certain doom and hell His laughter rang louder than the wind He thrust his hood from bare bone skull And surely to damnation her soul he’d send If she could not resist his fatal pull Then song of ages past she did cite Remembering of such a night she’d been told Her words filled with magic and light of white Passed down from shaman of long ago The wind did heed the call of lore The clouds did part so that moon did shine And specter of Erebus who’d come before Shrieked and shriveled back into brine So you see my friend, this is a wary tale Of what evil and darkness lurks upon the land Remember your goodness and you cannot fail To turn from lure of temptation’s hand s.a.t. Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hey Susan...loved it. LOL! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Susan, you really hit a vein of inspiration with this one -- vivid and flowing. Stygian but redeemed... -MVS You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Image spectacular with a rhythm and flow that added pleasure to the read. Very well constructed, the rhyme didn't seem forced and the tale transitioned wonderfully. Then good advice in the end. Gold star for this one. |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
One word........GREAT |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
"I'll save ya Beany Boy" he shouted as he hurried into the room POW ZAP BAM "DAMN, he retorted then Beany Boy has hooters" and the dark one just grinned and nodded and they signed her for a contract with SI swimsuits |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Ooo, Susan, spooky with a moral... LOL at Dark's response....hehe K |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well this spooky tale certainly shivered me timbers! ![]() Happy Halloween Hugs, Linda |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thanks friends - it was fun - love those spooky tales and Halloween - I appreciate the feed back. Dark - you crack me up as always, and as always, it is a pleasure to be cracked up by you - E.A. - that little smiley dude - too much fun. Smiling at you - Hugs all, you warm my heart. Now I'm off to go look up Stygian - say what? hehe ![]() Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Great write Susan! Eric |
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