Open Poetry #34 |
Balcony . . . |
Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
So then . . . a dream The synonymous small place of solitude upon a hill congruently deep in the common forest beside a body of usual water identically lost to an invariant world constant mist among similar trees clouds above familiar stars the same slender willow with wheat colored hair those pale blue eyes the need for love |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice imagery here |
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Dautz Write Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 96 |
Especially liked the title of this--it ties it all together. The need of congruence, of a soul mate, perhaps? Enjoyed Dautz |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful write..much enjoyed. ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
does this poetry have some unique style, or is it freestyle? |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thanks to everyone so far DreamChild, “does this poetry have some unique style, or is it freestyle?” I don’t think it unique. I suspect it is derivative from my reading of other poets. John |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
John, Superb writing..I very much enjoyed. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
nice, the imagery is striking |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thanks Everyone This thing was a response to: A Balcony in the Forest by Julien Graeq ISBN: 1860462944 |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
many of your poems are in response to a painting, books, poems of others, history even or other play, wich part of reality life you would like to write? |
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