Open Poetry #34 |
I Am... |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I am... Waters that rage before the flood bathes. The shore that casts the waves into the seas. The light that shimmers upon the lake’s edge. the tear that glistens an eye. You are... The fountain that sprinkles a symphony. The coo of a mourning dove. The whisper that calls me. The moon that bathes my soul. We are... Flowers blooming upon the vine. Wine’s sparkle behind a crystal shell. A flake of snow, landing lightly upon a lid. A water’s drip before the fall spills. I am... The love that bubbles endlessly. The rush of cheeks in a roses blush. The cavern’s silence beneath a starry sky. An owls cry before the dawn. And as the day swallows the stars, as comets trace the pillow of darkness...As mountains move toward the seas...I am here.... Forever in love... With you... |
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WranglrButts9 Member
since 2004-10-24
Posts 108Iowa, US |
Wow is all I can say! This is absolutely awesome! Bailey Good judgment comes from experience, |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
What a wonderful write! I'm adding my "Wow". |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I kiss the ring of the poet. Truly beautiful, even in its echo. TD |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Oh Barry - you are such beauty and your words carry your soul - wonderful dear Sir- Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am... The love that bubbles endlessly. The rush of cheeks in a roses blush. The cavern’s silence beneath a starry sky. An owls cry before the dawn. And as the day swallows the stars, as comets trace the pillow of darkness...As mountains move toward the seas...I am here.... Forever in love... With you... ============================== Barry this is just so very lovely... both in its imagery and emotions... I love the twist you did on the "I am" theme and took it beyond in a beautiful confession of expression. The sincerety is its centerpiece. Very well done poet sir. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Confession of Expression... yes, what JM said... the Moth knows... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Barry, I enjoyed this because it reads softly and most factual in feelings, but to, a heart full of confidence and respect....and if you possess that, your relationship cannot fail. Tremendous write... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
When all the superlatives have been used .. may I just say, well done poet sir!!! ~ Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling man, now this is exceptional writing, you never fail to touch the hidden depths of me. Delicious writing, you have a huge talent, and I’m always impressed whenever I read your work. The flow and rhythm in this beauty cannot be bettered. I love it utterly, utterly, utterly And to think I only popped in to have a quick read not knowing I’d see a gem of wonder. Excellent writing truly one of your best Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
All I can say is this: "You most definitely are and she most assuredly must be!" Linda |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Barry, This is beautiful!! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hi Barry, this brought tears to my eyes. What a fantastic bit of writing from your heart. hugs, Marti A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
what the moth said... (chuckling) she says it better than I do most of the time... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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