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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Let my memories fade to grey I cut myself on their sharpness the jagged edges of that day keep me alone in the darkness No sight, no sound have horrors raised as much in darkness to this fate within my heart I am not crazed but snarl with savage teeth of hate A silent witness to that deed that burns within my very soul the smells and sounds have cut their creed and nothing now can make me whole The memories that should be gold are sharper than the stars above it wounds my soul as they are told and none can melt my heart with love You played the games to give you pow’r and planted thoughts that wound my worth it gave you pleasure for an hour how endlessly, you still my mirth Through my pain you offered up a gift to feed my dark despair and from my grieving you would sup to draw my strength and leave me bare The shadows haunt my bedroom walls emotions sharp have hurt my eye the memories bite as each one calls I am not dead and yet I die Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"the memories bite as each one calls I am not dead and yet I die" ooh, shivered me with this line as always, you give us a treat with great rhymes and imagery |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kethry A picture within a picture, enjoyed. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
You played the games to give you pow’r and planted thoughts that wound my worth it gave you pleasure for an hour how endlessly, you still my mirth Through my pain you offered up a gift to feed my dark despair and from my grieving you would sup to draw my strength and leave me bare This passage is so very painfully powerful. I hope you are alright. Thank you for posting such an emotional piece. Melton |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kethry~ You can write the pain like no one else I know~ So real ... it aches~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lynne, the title is perfecto for the poem. So much feelings you have written. A very solid write. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved one, You are one incredibly special lady, this poem expresses pain, the jagged hurt of raw pain like no other. Why is it, do you think, that you can write emotion like no other can? Why is it that when I visit these pages these days, as I do so rarely, my eyes light up when I spy your name? Could it be because your writing shines like a star in a sea of darkness, I think it may be one of the reasons. Yes this is good writing, but why it is so I can only guess its because you have a craft you hone and polish, and that is why your writing is superb and I love it. Superb darling one utterly, utterly perfect like you forever Mushy    Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The shadows haunt my bedroom walls emotions sharp have hurt my eye the memories bite as each one calls I am not dead and yet I die I wish I didn't know this... wish I didn't understand... wish I could appreciate the flow of words without the flash of recognition... But no one could write it better... This is superb, my friend! *S* |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Your words tie the title in the most perfect of bows. Your talent for exposing the feel in your verse is remarkable and you give us a most vivid portrayal. A pleasure to read you as always and a wish to find your rebirth of happiness in verse very soon. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Perfection! This is just too good for words. JL |
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Dautz Write Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 96 |
Potent words! The shadows haunt my bedroom walls emotions sharp have hurt my eye the memories bite as each one calls I am not dead and yet I die Enjoyed, Dautz Write... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I do understand |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Wow. Powerful all through, but you know I love that ending. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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