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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
many the eyes that cry for you more the lips that sigh for you many the hearts that'd die for you and more to come who'll try for you but none will care as much as I none who'll understand reasons why none to know in any case from wence you came to thrive this place none who'll promise now always none who'll look beyond the daze who'll wait for more than just your praise or quickened heart or fever raised none to love you as I do beyond the rosy colored hue beneath the scars of black and blue and to the depths of soul of you these are the things that I believe that somewhere in your heart you grieve that I was more than whispered kiss and so much more than words like this I've stood in line and waited there ached at what I felt unfair but not one moment did love fail to warm me in this lonely hell yes, many the eyes that search for you many who'll promise their whole life through but remember as you pass me by the love within these deep brown eyes... ~tier |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
but none will care as much as I ~*~ You know, I think you captured a part of me in this... Welcome home, Tier... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh...how pretty! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Tier~ Absolutely beautiful! Hugs ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yanno Tier? It always amazes me how someone can write this well without being handcuffed by the rhyming. I guess I need a better vocabulary. (Or learn to use the one I own) Very nice! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
a prayer, a vow, a lament and how fervantly written and beautiful to read aloud. These blue pages are donning graces today... I feast.  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I haven't adequate words to tell how this affected me. May I echo Serenity? Exquisite writing! miscellanea |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Whoops. I meant to add this to my library. Try, try again! It's now tucked away on a shelf. Thanks. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
agreeing with Ed here, your rhyme is like a song, and just beautiful . . . |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Thank you all for your kind comments and praises, they mean more than you know! ~tier |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
this was so beautiful, so heartfelt, so wishing someone wrote it to me |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Wow....I know the feeling.... ~sky So you go and make it happen |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Yes - excellent Dave |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
yes, many the eyes that search for you many who'll promise their whole life through but remember as you pass me by the love within these deep brown eyes... ************* All the familiar names are popping up. Glad to see yours is one of them. I very much enjoyed this. The flow was excellent from beginning to end and it even rhymed. A treat indeed. Great read. |
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