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In Key of F I heard the wind
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In Key of F I heard the wind |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I tossed them Now “S” shaped in neglect till they Resembled gnarled drawings of stem From charcoal sketch of what should have been Colors Vibrant with hues of blush Like your shoulder when I watched the dress Slip off them and to the floor The vase is empty my love And I have found the space no comfort Against sharp pointed crystal and light One long night I dreamed Of fingers hushed against my lips As the rest of me found sound Playing straddled notes So low that I in subtle exhale Left my own bass on the scale Crosshatched on the glass of us And refracting light on roses Still fresh then Darkness adds comfort to eyes That hide the ghosts of then Today my love I threw out the stems And thought as I turned my head I saw you standing there Bared to me Again |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron Sometimes you have to throw things away in order to see what you have. Wonderful writing again, my friend!  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Your title is incredibly descriptive! I know that key... I believe F is the note by which alarm clocks shrilly awake us. One of my old cars buzzed on F when the seatbelt didn't work right--oh, the discomfort... Fine writing, cpat. (I am wondering how this name came about! Everytime I write it, I have to do a double take so I don't misspell it. At first I thought it was the abbreviation for captain. Then I realized no. Laugh as you may, but to remember its spelling I have to think to myself "c cat run" (OLd Dick and Jane reading series!) Then I switch the c for a p! Would you let us in on how you came about the name? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Martie my friend... thank you Mis E... lol.. long and boring story plus I was dislexic when I typed it.. just call me Ron |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write..yet again today from you Ron, sir.  Thank you for the added bonus! Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Ron, Thanks for the explanation... I'm still dyslexic! Truly, probably am, especially when I'm tired! An old poem of mine: **This is written about myself in good humor (or poor as that may be) about my typo's and spelling mistakes! My Spelling Airers Yearing, her spelling erred She mirrored wards back and homophones forth adding interest to decipher. As her dear beloved friend, I told her Weed keep the writing pu, But she just looked at me and said, "You've gotta be joking, Sadie, time to hang it up!" Sew words like clothes, we hung them up under clothes-hook's springing tension and erred them out online. (Hopefully, this poem will be the last spelling error i make for a wile!) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
One long night I dreamed Of fingers hushed against my lips As the rest of me found sound Playing straddled notes So low that I in subtle exhale Left my own bass on the scale Crosshatched on the glass of us And refracting light on roses ~*~ ummmmhummmm..... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This poem is truly haunting...wonderful write |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
One long night I dreamed Of fingers hushed against my lips As the rest of me found sound Playing straddled notes So low that I in subtle exhale Left my own bass on the scale Crosshatched on the glass of us And refracting light on roses Still fresh then Darkness adds comfort to eyes That hide the ghosts of then ================================= You NEED to be published because I NEED to be able to hold these poems in my hands...run my fingers over the words....feel the paper, smell the ink and leather... take them and sit by the creek under a cottonwood and inhale your words...read your poetry outloud to the trees.... How can you deny the moth and the trees. lol  I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Yes... Paper and leather...so one can touch the beauty as well as read it...  thank you."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPat~ I hope you don't mind the sound of  This is just gorgeous~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
This is a very touching, beautifully haunting write, sir. Into my library it goes... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
always amazing |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you all for the nice words... they are appreciated |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
"Darkness adds comfort to eyes That hide the ghosts of then" ********************************** just wanted to pass through you...glad I did.. **just me** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This sounded like a duet with Karen . . . another one I would love to see you posting with. Beautiful Ron |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am thinking that if I were to be your manager I could see you published with all the ladies who are dying to write to, for and with you. and make a killing! You dorable dyslexic damper dan you are incredibly gifted. Listen to the "Moth" will ya, she knows of what she speaks. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I don't know how I missed this amazing write, you always make me sigh Sir Ron and yanno? I love it! Mxx  and I am haunted |
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