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Open Poetry #33
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elfine
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since 2004-06-08
Posts 35
traveling
0 posted 2004-07-29 01:00 PM


the voices shrill
unlike the soft tones i remember,
unlike the warm words
folding in around me.

i tell myself
that *it* has changed,
not me:
i am
       the same
young vibrant page
on which the world
writes its experience.

but i am the changeling:

darker eyes
and darker mind
now cloud --
perfect --
my vision.

i turn,
trailing manuscripts:

the wiser for the reading.
© Copyright 2004 elfine - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
1 posted 2004-07-29 01:07 PM

Welcome to Passions!  A wonderful first post,
and very much enjoyed.  

the wiser for the reading....

how true those words ring!

It's better than I could have planned..
it's made me who I am...
{Trace Adkins}
Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
2 posted 2004-07-29 01:10 PM

"the same
young vibrant page
on which the world
writes its experience"

oh this is good!!

Welcome to pip!!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~
Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
3 posted 2004-07-29 01:41 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
I so much enjoyed your first post.
Looking forward to seeing more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Nightshade
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just out of reach
4 posted 2004-07-29 02:06 PM


Martie
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5 posted 2004-07-29 02:15 PM

elfine

"i turn,
trailing manuscripts:

the wiser for the reading."

Yes, I can relate to this!  Enjoyed your poem...and welcome to Passions!
Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
6 posted 2004-07-29 03:05 PM

Welcome, welcome!  Much enjoyed your first post.  

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.
suthern
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7 posted 2004-07-29 04:55 PM

I enjoyed this very much. Welcome to Passions! *S*
Jeffrey Carter
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State of constant confusion!
8 posted 2004-07-29 04:57 PM

"i am
       the same
young vibrant page
on which the world
writes its experience."

Oh man, ain't that the truth?

Very well written, welcome to Passion's!
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
9 posted 2004-07-29 05:15 PM

Oh, Wonderful!  Welcome to Passions!  Please, check your E-mail for a Very Special Greeting!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?  Keeping in mind, I must stand close...

Midnitesun
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Gaia
10 posted 2004-07-29 05:21 PM

Welcome! enjoyed this unique, interesting  write. Happy trailings!
Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
11 posted 2004-07-29 09:01 PM

Elfine~



Oh my ... this is a moving read~
Welcome to our circle~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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elfine
Junior Member
since 2004-06-08
Posts 35
traveling
12 posted 2004-07-29 09:02 PM


What a wonderful welcome to Passions!  Thank you all for reminding me of the reasons I write!  
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
13 posted 2004-07-30 07:31 PM

Nice writing...James
whiskey
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14 posted 2004-07-30 08:02 PM

Wonderful first post, definately rings true. Welcome to pip look forward to reading more

"Dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. "
Contabo
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15 posted 2004-07-30 08:04 PM

Excellent!!

I am in expectation of the next one.

Contabo
yv
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Posts 574
16 posted 2004-07-30 08:47 PM

I thought this poem was beautiful.  The words dripped off of each other amorously like the kisses that slip from the petals of a rose.  I loved it.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.
miscellanea
Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060
OH
17 posted 2004-07-30 09:05 PM

Very intriguing choice of words.  Enjoyed the introspection...

Welcome to Piptalk.  Glad your here.
  
             miscellanea
passing shadows
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displaced
18 posted 2004-07-31 04:37 AM

wow! Welcome to Passions!!!
serenity blaze
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19 posted 2004-07-31 08:22 AM

Welcome to Pip!

This is fine work, and I do look forward to reading more from you in the future.

Enjoyed.
iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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USA
20 posted 2004-07-31 06:01 PM

Great write!  Welcome!
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