Fencing - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #33

Fencing

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

0 posted 2004-07-28 08:14 PM

(edited repost)

Once upon a time
we did mesh
bound as we were
through threads of
longing & empathy

It began with one link
Then a network-
A history of little things
rusted & new

Together we weaved
fragility along a seemingly
fortified foundation
back then we danced
between the twins with
no safeties...

Many thought me insane
& you, crazy
when in reality
we both were
simply,

wired...
~tier

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2004-07-28 08:16 PM

Very good metaphor......great write! .......jo

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

2 posted 2004-07-28 08:20 PM

I like this.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

3 posted 2004-07-28 08:45 PM

Thanks Illiana and Susan for taking the time to read and comment.

~tier

Broken
Member

since 2000-03-12

Posts 271
The woods

4 posted 2004-07-29 01:14 AM

"Many thought me insane
& you, crazy
when in reality
we both were
simply,

wired..."

I like it, I like that ending, It creates a sort of silence before the last word or line is said, it makes it more emotional.

~Broken~

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.