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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA 
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wrinkled bedsheets, coverlet tossed to the floor... candles leaning, burned sideways in their holders... the smell of sweat and incense hangs in my nostrils a t-shirt lies at the foot of the bed its too big to be mine... sounds from the bathroom, shower running, someone stifles a laugh suddenly... i decide that surprising you for lunch wasn't such a good idea... Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
ouch ! another moment captured, by what feel like teeth. snow "Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless." |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
whoooppps and OUCHHHH! You caught me totally off guard until the t-shirt. Wham! Definitely grabbed my emotions with this... misc'e |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
wham is right.. delivery was outstanding! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Ouch...Right between the eyes!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Chris~ Oh wow ... that stings~ Developed sooooooooo well ... caught me off guard too~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Gee, maybe a phone call first would have been best. Excellent write with a POW ending. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
thanks everybody Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
ouch... hugs, g "Everybody just wants to get high...sit and watch a perfect world go by..." (T.McGraw) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ouch....definately packs the punch... not to mention stirrs some old memories of sorts....but luckily enough, those moments have passed. HUGS to you. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The fervent disbelief of such a moment is embedded completely in the folds of strong resolve. Very well done. If your path was set to take you through this moment, then the hard won reasons enrich your way. TD |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Ouch! A rather stark counterpoint to the one I just posted..... /pip/Forum90/HTML/003318.html ~~J |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
I thought this had slid off into the black hole of "already posted that one" thanks for bringing it back up everybody.. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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