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AS Luck Would Have It?
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AS Luck Would Have It? |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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As Luck Might Have It? Wildcat screams in the darkness Hanging the moon… While brushing the hair Out of the eyes of laughter… Tiptoeing past all the insinuating alleys Still life visible through blooming Windows of time…sometimes crying a Simultaneous chorus of sullied terror Spine chilling terror Like hanging upside down from A 50 ft. story bridge…watching the water Daring not to move…feeling my grip slip Growing deeper and closer Feeling those jagged rocks tearing into my Chance encounter…razor sharp I wanted an outrageous slice of Infinite numbers I lost the directory for Paranormal Phenomena So I phoned 1-800-solo ensembles Spitting on failures, whipping my mouth Dabbing the tears from my willing self Counting the fidelity of singularity Stirring the hours to music Getting in touch with a physic Who reads tarot cards to thetune of inner voices He anchors my subconscious forefinger Which points me to low vibrations Affirming the glow of today Guiding new encounters which believe in change It’s all in how you select and order music Or fostering the cliché Better Luck Tomorrow? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Reading your first verse is stepping onto a fast ride... where the finish comes both as surprise... and sigh that the ride is over. *S* Excellent work!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
What a whirlwind--this is very surreal and reads like a rush or a hallucination. There's one line that keeps sticking in my head tho: "Counting the fidelity of singularity" and like a message in a dream I find myself wondering, "what does this mean?" Wow, Lee.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
LeeJ I loved the unique feel of the first part, the almost helter skelter of its great imagery...and then this: "He anchors my subconscious forefinger Which points me to low vibrations Affirming the glow of today Guiding new encounters which believe in change It’s all in how you select and order music Or fostering the cliché Better Luck Tomorrow?" Can you lead me to that intuitive? A wonderful, introspective write, my friend. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
You are a word wizard, Lee J. Wonderful work! JL |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wildcat screams in the darkness Hanging the moon… While brushing the hair Out of the eyes of laughter… caught me right there at the beginning and held me in your grip of words till the ending. Awesome! hugs, Chris |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Your wonderful command of the English language holds the reader spellbound until the very end Lee. Another amazing write m'friend. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
etc squared...sliced across the grain and tomorrow has webs between the toes so the sand won't fall through when stirring the mud pies dry you push so much into an image photos close up of mouths full way cool stuff ms |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! |
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