Magnus
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since 2001-10-10
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South Carolina, USA
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2004-07-18
04:10 PM
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Night came on padded feet as a desert chill covered a star filled blackened eve as a wanderer slumbered.
Such was he this wanderer who traipsed the desert floor. A true sage among men in search of treasure’s lore.
To find the gold and jewels beneath the shifting sands. To walk a course kept on the palms of weathered hands.
No love does live within a heart of beating steel. No words will ever flow in chosen thoughts reveal.
For through his eyes you see a darkness that withheld a lost love’s destiny where tears no longer welled.
And as the rising dawn awakes the serpent's rest a shadow rises tall...
alone he walks his quest.
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Barry J. Tackett
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Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
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2004-07-18
04:17 PM
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Magnus~ Good heavens, but this is beautiful~
The title, the perfected doormat that lead me in ... the read, such a treat for this starving poetess-in-read~
Beautimous~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, the spirit rejoices over what it has left. - Sufi epigram <))><
noles1@totcon.com
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Martie
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California
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2004-07-18
04:20 PM
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Barry
A portrait of art! Bravo!
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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
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2004-07-18
04:33 PM
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Barry, Well done my friend, very much enjoyed the read.
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Midnitesun
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since 2001-05-18
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Gaia
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2004-07-18
04:36 PM
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cool write, Barry!
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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
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2004-07-18
04:36 PM
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AHA.....sounds like the beginnings of a serious series...you game? Hmmmm...I see a very small smile at the idea...
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Magnus
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since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA
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2004-07-18
04:43 PM
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A serious series? A small smile??...Nevah! (the smile part)...which is a little larger than small....
Hmmmmm...got me thinking Sun....Actually, I already was...but you knew that already, huh?
Thanx all....
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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
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2004-07-18
04:53 PM
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iliana
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USA
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2004-07-18
05:00 PM
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Beautiful -- I'm with Sunshine on this one. I'd like to see where the journey leads, Barry...........*hugs*.....jo
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Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
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2004-07-18
09:00 PM
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I'll follow the path, lead where you will--
SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.
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ThisDiamond
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2004-07-18
10:52 PM
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Keeping company on the journey Mag... much enjoyed the prelude. TD
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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
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2004-07-18
11:00 PM
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"No love does live within a heart of beating steel."
~ This loving 'angel' would be up for the task! I love a challenge! ~ to breathe love into that heart of steel.
There is hope for him! At least his heart is still beating!
The heat of love can melt the hardest steel! EA
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Cpat Hair
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2004-07-20
09:43 AM
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still Mr Smooth I see... nice to read you sir.. I see you have lost nothing in style and delivery
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Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
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Florida
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2004-07-20
09:49 AM
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"alone he walks his quest"
Barry this was outstanding!!!
"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" ~Sarah McLachlan~
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Nightshade
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since 2001-08-31
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just out of reach
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2004-07-20
11:42 AM
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To find the gold and jewels beneath the shifting sands. To walk a course kept on the palms of weathered hands.
Wow !! You just keep gettin' better! A keeper for sure. hugs, Chris Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale. Hans Christian Anderson
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passing shadows
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displaced
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2004-07-20
12:08 PM
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astounding
just wow
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devinechild22
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2004-07-20
03:46 PM
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You paint a beautiful picture with your words. I love how you write!
"No love does live within a heart of beating steel. No words will ever flow in chosen thoughts reveal."
By far my favorite verse. An accomplishment.. well done! *Allison*~~~***~~~Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland~~~***~~~
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