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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
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 She doesn’t share with you broken hearted echoes instead captures them like fireflies.... To set them free another night in silent screams because in dreams you love her because in mornings after.... your kiss lingers and your voice ......echoes...... ~SEA~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
because in mornings after.... your kiss lingers and your voice ......echoes...... very very cool lines SEA, so good to again read your poetry... next time? please don't make us wait so long ok? HUGS |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Beautiful, Susan! Really, really lovely! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I hope your collection of broken hearted echos is small.. and the lights you see dancing are in his eyes..and yours.. you always show heart my friend..and you always touch with your words. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
SEA A delight to read. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
because in dreams you love her because in mornings after.... your kiss lingers and your voice ......echoes...... You are the princess of the sea....weaving pink sands out of shells, Plesant read |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Very interesting. Was not expecting this, from your title. Is your reference to fireflies merely that of a curious child? Now I wonder, did you intend to imply the parallel of "breaking the fireflies' hearts" by capturing them. Their signalling is, as you must know, all about attracting a mate, which is spoiled when they are captured. Your line "because in mornings after" might also be written more poignantly as "because in mournings after". Enjoyed. |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Wonderful write SEA bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oooooh, yeah. I like this one. Very nice write. JL |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Krawdad... cool questions that I wasn't expecting... I will try to clear it up a bit... it's about dreaming of someone you love, but can't be with...and the echoes of those dreams (the broken hearted echoes) are what she captures and later sets free, (in slient screams) because the emotions are ones she can't openly share, with the person she dreams of. And in those dreams, that is where he loves her back...and in the dreams, he kisses her and talks to her, and when she wakes up, they stay with her...the sound of his voice, the feel of his kiss...(they echo through her waking day) that's all it was about I hope that makes any kind of sense?? thanks for the questions, and to the others, thank you for the replies |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
She doesn’t share with you broken hearted echoes instead captures them like fireflies.... Excellent simile! Enjoyed this a lot. misc'e |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Susan..very much enjoyed! Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
lovely, especially that last stanza! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Something very wisp-like about this, like trying to capture fire-flies in a jar. lovely! Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
instead captures them like fireflies.... To set them free another night ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ in dreams you love her because in mornings after.... your kiss lingers and your voice ......echoes...... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ooooooh I like this style on you... it suits your expression well...love the analogy and imagery...and your explanation made perfect moth sense.  No one does aches and echos like you. I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like this...James |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sometimes our dreams set the perfect stage for love, and when they do, don't you just want to stay there forever!!!! Oh SEA, it's so good to read you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice to read you again |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ What a lovely perception ... a beauty for sure~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"because in dreams you love her because in mornings after.... your kiss lingers and your voice ......echoes......" Once again, Susan...you paint the softest pictures.  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Sparks to cherish ... in dreams, like fireflies. Really beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hey there little one... which treasure chest did you pluck this one from?  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"because in dreams you love her" hmmmmm...now that is beautiful, and so are you.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
It is very interesting. Juju |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Lovely. *Allison* ~~~***~~~Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland~~~***~~~ |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
I agree with everyone....very beautiful writing SEA. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
lovely,my friend |
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