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Emotions from a paper cup.
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Emotions from a paper cup. |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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she closes the front door to her life with a breeze passing by her life is a rollar coaster she breathes in the bittersweet aroma of repitition with memorys flying past her spontaneity just out of reach his lips made an imprint on her his cologne lingers on her mind like a cool summers night she can never forget pouring her emotions into a paper cup wishing she was so much more than this |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you could very well be writing about me here...  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Chelsea, I thought this was really good. I particularly liked your opening lines. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
A very good poem about self examination As simply as you will be more tomorrow from the events of today You will be so much more and are already You will not forget, but you will forgive, yourself and others who have shadowed your karma... and then, there are those who compliment your being, those are the memories to embrace. I believe if we all felt we'd like every persons thoughts of us who we've known to be good ones, perhaps we'd think first before we react to negative? Especially enjoyed...his lips made an imprint on her As does everyone, everyone you meet and will continue to meet leaves something behind for you to savor and learn from This was a deliecate read...thank you for sharing. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
exhale Take a deep breath. Enjoyed |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much... painful as it is. *S* |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Depth of feeling is poured into this piece, pain, sorrow, longing. What's good to remember is we are as a spring bubbling from the earth, what is spilled, sometimes spoiled from outside sources, is replaced with purity and renewed chance.  susanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Yes, breathe deeply, but remember to exhale. I enjoy your ability to always leave the reader with an emotional thought. |
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