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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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there are lessons to be dealt with I lie on a spatter of words arranged and rearranged how easy it is to scribble a moment I write of all the occurrences in the sea those which lie in me the tides and their curiosities that beat around and pound the shore to form the crescent lines of your face I trace the scars and in a damp way bury them to another coast with the bluntness of my thumb [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (10-20-2004 03:23 AM).] |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Impresssive thinking. A pleasure to read. miscellanea |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I, too, write for catharsis. and here you are, your heart spilling, even as you try mightily to hold back the tide.   love this love you  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree I picture you with a pencil, sketching and using your thumb to soften the lines...you do that in this poem. Lovely!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
There seems to be hurt here but softened at the edges.. So well said Maree.... Lovely you~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
HUG |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sigh |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Careful with that thumb, Lady! You could be causing some poor map-maker a misery. Loved it Darkone |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
miscellanea, I'm so happy you enjoyed. Thank you. m'lady? love you too thank you. Martie, thank you beautiful... I wish I could do that for real. Nancy, i thank you muchly. Bello? HUG back thanksDixie, sighing with you, thank you. Bro? lol now that would be interesting. Thank you for reading m'friend. allMxx and I am haunted |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good Lord, Maree no kidding: how easy it is to scribble a moment |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this is absolutely.....yes, you know and the subtle little rhyme, oh, how i adore that.... i adore this Maria |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel~ I sooooooo agree with MartieSis on this~ I couldn't help but think of charcoal sketches ... framed for all of time~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
What's cooler than (being) cool? Ice cold might work for Outkast, but I think it's a Maree poem. più fresco |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Some scribble...in crayon. Some...scribble...in time. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Excellent prose! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sue, thanks dear Dawn (Don) winkies....thanks Lady glad you enjoyed. Marge, thank you. What's cooler than being cool? You showing up and reading my poem ..all by yourself LOL hugs Jamsey.  Kari? "Some scribble...in crayon. Some...scribble...in time." Some scribble in free verse some scribble in Rhyme yup that's the best I can do LOL Thank you sunshinygirl.LeeJ, thank you so much. and I am haunted |
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