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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving 
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Inanimate ``````````` that Lonesome dance across a myriad of chalk lines souls strewn askew gutter deep the agony breaking the traffic's symphony sleep, sleep down where the silence seeps and the angels creep between cracks in pavement like weeds wicked things that steal the air and suffocate the needs of those left dying there concrete heartbeat fading eroding away leaving me as empty space evidence that I existed maybe a little less that way |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
OH Dawn, I feel every word of this.... you have painted this picture so well and captured the sadness. Very very well done gal... The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dawn, from a poetic perspective I very much enjoyed reading your words, but from a personal one, it saddened me. If this poem is a reflection of how you yourself feel at this time, I truly am sorry. I have missed your poetry and warm presence. You are a lovely poetess both on the inside and out. Loving, comforting hugs, EA P.S. Anyone who can write as beautifully as you do, is most definitely animate.  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
you both are so sweetly recieved..thank you so much. this poem is part of a series, feelings that are bursting forth every now and again... i hadnt announced, but i was in a bad car accident a couple of months ago...and i have written from that "place".... im physically and emotionally still healing. so dont worry too much... its part of that process but its settling and comforting to know, you all are so supportive regardless of cause.  |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
deeply moving sorrow... **babygirL** |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Hi ya sweet aussie...beautifully sad write here gal..hope you're doing well.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah sweetie...I had wondered where you were. I do hope you are healing emotionally and physically now. ~Sending healing hugs your way~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I had hoped that you would be feeling better. But this, it seems, is a very strong step forward in the healing. And for reanimation, though "lifeless", you never are! Hugs |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
your words become a brilliance for others to be guided by...to know in a world of despair, there is a poetess who shines like a gem in the night sky. Very well done...sending hugs and smiles to rest by your side. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wicked things that steal the air and suffocate the needs of those left dying there bravo ma'am... bravo |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ron picked them - they ache and do it well! Great piece that I saved  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Amazing, how writing is a healer in several ways... well done, dear. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 you rock!! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
sleep, sleep down where the silence seeps and the angels creep between cracks in pavement like weeds wicked things that steal the air and suffocate the needs of those left dying there I felt every word.  Mxx and I am haunted |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God, Dawn - this sings: sleep, sleep down where the silence seeps and the angels creep between cracks in pavement like weeds |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
you've put me in a difficult place, desperately trying to figure out which i l@ve more, the poem or the new pic nice to see you're tapping into this place rather than hiding from it, hugs |
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MovesInSilence Member
since 2004-03-21
Posts 111Perth, Australia |
Right beside you in this one buddy. oh wait i was umm hmmm..next time your driving  This poem is perfectly written, i can only hope that some of your talent will rub off on me.  It's not the blindfold that blinds you, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a passionately sad write |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wicked things that steal the air and suffocate the needs of those left dying there these lines still grab me... well done mS silent one.. |
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