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babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

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New York City

0 posted 2004-10-17 01:41 PM

Winter slept
in the wild innocence of orchids,
silent white songs crouched
and swollen as blood on the tongue
swells with one breath held precious
and broken by the watermark
that floods over my mouth,
smitten by the warmth of blood
as it tunnels the cradle
out of which my flesh came
into this wilderness of wild orchids
whose dreams bleed a little deeper,
plunge into another heavy silver,
un-breathable slowing element,
your trust, bears the liquid colors
I have no use for, anymore
than one breath held precious
and broken, crouched in cinders,
here is the hurt and how it lasts
forever, as I cast my blood
on the waters that bore our love,
in innocence, winter slept
in the desperate pink flesh of my lips,
as it tore away on your tongue
like the papery wing of a moth,
bloodied by the dormant thirst
of frozen orchids.

Wild Orchid Series
2004 copyright BabygirlPress

e-me @ [email protected] for the link to the rest of this series...now in print..

P E A C E and O N E

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2004-10-17 01:47 PM

babygirlwlove
Frozen orchids is a poem in itself.
Enjoyed the read.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2004-10-17 01:53 PM

Good Morning New York! Being awestruck up here, I have no words, except send the link please.

~ Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self
~ Cyril Connolly

klm
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since 2004-09-07

Posts 58
New Orleans, Atlanta

3 posted 2004-10-17 02:11 PM

exceptional.

The true poet writes to express, not impress.

IndigoEve
Member

since 2003-01-10

Posts 279
Etched in the illusion of time

4 posted 2004-10-17 02:34 PM

"Winter slept
in the wild innocence of orchids"

I cannot get over how much you remind me of my own style, when I get truly inspired.
I love.
Just love.

If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

5 posted 2004-10-17 03:41 PM

thanks guys....

Mysteria...check your mail...I've zapped you the link...

love&light,
**babygirL**

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

6 posted 2004-10-17 05:40 PM

Amazing!

cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

~ani difranco~

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2004-10-17 06:14 PM

whining...now why can't I do this?

I just read this aloud and I should be typing my reply in green I am so envious.

absolutely stunning

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

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the ass-end of space

8 posted 2004-10-17 06:23 PM

free flowing. nice work

oh and serenity, we all know you can so pbllllt

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

9 posted 2004-10-17 06:40 PM

thank you all for hitting this...I appreciate every thought and comment....Serenity...from what I read of you...you can truly hold your own...thank you for all the love...

**babygirL**

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

10 posted 2004-10-17 07:39 PM

"Winter slept
in the wild innocence of orchids,
silent white songs crouched
and swollen as blood on the tongue"
OMG, I love this! *sigh* what a beauty of a write.

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

11 posted 2004-10-17 08:13 PM

Excellent! and easy to see why you are in print.

You have an exceptional voice.

(I would say to pay Serenity no mind, except that she too is a singular talent and well worth the read.)

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

12 posted 2004-10-17 09:20 PM

MIdnite & Wranx...

thank you both for stopping in on this...

**babygirL**

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

13 posted 2004-10-17 11:08 PM

wow.....the title really pulled me in, I LOVE orchids....you have talent....yes, indeed!

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

14 posted 2004-10-17 11:13 PM

smiling at you
and nodding to the other comments made here

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

15 posted 2004-10-18 06:14 AM

greeneyes & muted...

thank you for the smiles...

love&light,
**BabygirL**

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

16 posted 2004-10-18 08:34 AM

babyg?

as I cast my blood
on the waters that bore our love,
in innocence, winter slept
in the desperate pink flesh of my lips,
as it tore away on your tongue
like the papery wing of a moth,
bloodied by the dormant thirst
of frozen orchids.

This is without flaw.

*tossing pen in trash, again*
*smile*

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

17 posted 2004-10-18 08:36 AM

outstanding lines, each one more visual and creative as the last...simply awesome!

Enjoyed...and thank you

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

18 posted 2004-10-18 08:41 AM

littlewing...

thanks for hitting this...don't throw that pen anywhere!...I enjoy your work so much and consider myself lucky to be among so many talented poets...

**babygirl**

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

19 posted 2004-10-18 08:41 AM

LeeJ...

thank you for stopping to read...so much appreciated...

**babygirL**

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

20 posted 2004-10-18 08:54 AM

baby.....What?...Do you ever sleep?..Or do you just ponder on poems in all your free time?...Do you just come up with all this or is this stuff you've written over a period of time?....Whatever the case, your mind works incredibly...

babygirlwlove
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since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

21 posted 2004-10-18 09:06 AM

Toe~

actually, I have alot of trouble sleeping...lol...writing is the only way I know how to breathe, man...This series of poems (Wild Orchids), is older...

The other poems I've posted here and Behind Closed Doors are relatively fresh...lol..no pun, you know...

thanks for the love...damn, that PIC you sent me is soooooooo hot.

lol
**babygirL**

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

22 posted 2004-10-18 02:52 PM

I am with Karen on this one..

stunning piece and I wish I could just think like this let alone write like this...

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

babygirlwlove
Senior Member

since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

23 posted 2004-10-18 02:53 PM

Susan~

thank you for the very kind reply....

much love&light,
**Mari**

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