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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time 
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A little bit of this is To Jack ~~ I study my nails too closely for your liking, like any novelist might. We concentrate deeply, a crack in my teacup spills little contradictions down your neck. Dripping. A part of my eyes catch on broken terra cotta. Can't remember, was it your hands or mine that the blue stain of enamel and varnish blended with spider veins and grooves, callused - "Don't apologize." I look away. There is nothing we can do for each other. The waters stirring November puddles in coffee and depleted cream, as we seamlessly avoid that ache, that agony; Rain in the winter. Your fingers are shaking, as is your soul. I fear for the circumstance, aloof and tragic, her lips a violent purple line in such methodical contrast to that of your unfathomable lengths. How hard can I whisper into your ears, 'til it burns They can't ever know, they won't understand. It's jagged and unsophisticated, cracks in clay. My eyes never leave your serration, and I laugh at how serious you are when asking the proper manner of adding rosacea to tea. If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool write |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A very nice write Well crafted...introspective and emotive |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
outstanding write... K |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
feeling this intensity travel between souls... "Your fingers are shaking, as is your soul" like that.... **babygirL** |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Superb scene setting! I was sort of hoping this relationship would continue over dinner. Funny how poetry can make me feel I am watching a classical 40's movie sometimes if it is well written. Enjoyed the hill. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Admire the way you use settings, objects to create mood. I agree with Mysteria, there's a film noire aspect to your poetry. Reminds me of a fantastic poet we once had here named bsquirrel and those who remember his words will tell you what a huge and most deserving compliment that is  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
An excellent posting  |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Excellent write. I loved it. coyote 8) |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
WEll done Eve... I always to look forward to your artistic paints. Watercolors of perfection. TD |
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