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Open Poetry #33

Wet Dreams 1st draft

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since 2001-11-21

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0 posted 2004-10-15 10:20 PM

wet Dreams

A cracked dawn wakes sodden,
drained of slumber in a toss-turned night
parting dreams tangled of bed sheets soaked
through memories of those horrid, floored
cold on saw-curf oak; tongue to groove
weeping mortar…. sawdust ground to grain
shellacked by skin-oil footsteps splashing
in night sweats pooled under the first cup
sugar cubed just this side of a diabetic coma
to wash the bitterness from the night

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J.Samm
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since 2004-01-12

Posts 415
Iloilo City, Philippines

1 posted 2004-10-16 01:27 AM

wow, such images...a powerful write

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since 2001-11-21

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2 posted 2004-10-16 08:21 AM

Thank you so much for reading JSamm....it means so much.

I hope you took a few images and made them personally yours.

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Snow

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since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

3 posted 2004-10-17 10:39 AM

this is written
a lot like i would have said it.
only, i think...better.
the images are as clear as though
they came from my own mind.
nothing to change... i hope you
won't.

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

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since 2001-11-21

Posts 159

4 posted 2004-10-17 06:47 PM

Thank you for reading snow.

Are you really sure that I should let this lay??

Stay tuned......I will think on it.

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Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

5 posted 2004-10-17 11:04 PM

I know how it feels to wash the bitterness from the night....how wonderfully put....

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

Wolf777
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since 2001-02-28

Posts 20

6 posted 2004-10-18 08:44 PM

"skin-oil footsteps"

Well, that is not only an exceptional image but such a powerful statement, IMHO!

Damn fine writing.

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since 2001-11-21

Posts 159

7 posted 2004-10-19 06:55 PM

thank you wolfie

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