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Hallelucination
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Hallelucination |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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It, or they Started appearing weeks ago It, because I’ve never seen more than one at a time They, because the one I see varies in size Somewhere between a cat and a mouse As black and unformed as a fleeting dark thought At first I would notice the visitors on peripheries At the edge of my vision Skirting along the creases of things And it was easy to tell myself That it was just some trick of light or focus Or, half-joke to myself That it was simply a bit of undigested Hallucinogenic gruel Lately though, it has become bolder Moving across my field of vision As if it had become comfortable in my presence Gliding with the fluid grace of a Chinese acrobat Up and over my desk, disappearing behind it And in its’ smaller form, letting me watch it Roll across the floor and into my shoe That they exist at all is not in question They are validated in my acknowledgement The “how” of it Perhaps an extension of my own existentialism Now, only the “whys” remain Why do they come dressed as a shadow A flat-black nothing, neither Ogre nor Angel? And why manifest themselves only in this shack? Could it be That they are a product or function of this hermitage And representative of things left undone? Or merely a device To provide a little animation in a place lacking “life”? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"The “how” of it Perhaps an extension of my own existentialism " YOU KNOW I LOVE THIS "Now, only the “whys” remain" and methinks I'd die without them. *tossing roses to a yeti* (Abraham Lincolns) grin cause that's how freedom smells hug me  thank you *battin' lashes* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Methinks this be a fine poem for the middle of October, when life sits shelved between summer and winter, waiting to fall into an unknown... ah yes...you've got me smiling first thing this morning... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Ed, this has a certain observational/contemplative/matter-of-fact feel as only your writes do and has rippled its visual into my imagination and awareness -- thanks for the impressions. -MVS You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
perceptual attunement opens channel of attention enjoyed this... K |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
have you had lasiks surgery? Well I have and I don't see anything like that?...geeze lousie, I'm calling my doctor, No Fair! Terrific write hugs...and smiles |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Was telling ghost stories around a bonfire last night, this would've been a great one. It is just a story, isn't it Ed?  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
LOL@Duncan... You know what my shadows are? my doubts. they haunt me day and night. Ed, I loved this! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I am so happy you posted this, you are a true wonder and this is maybe something that we can never answer for sure, but just know that I know. *smile* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
ED! FROM ONE WHO KNOWS ALTOGETHER TOO WELL: DO NOT UNDER ANY CIRCUMSTANCES INTERACT WITH THIS THING. THIS IS THE PRECISE DESCRIPTION OF SOMETHING I DID INTERACT WITH, AND WITH DREADFUL RESULTS. I'll tell you more, but not here..... not kidding, Ed Ed ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
At first I would notice the visitors on peripheries At the edge of my vision Skirting along the creases of things Your use of imagery is wonderful in this write Ed. As to seeing things... I believe I've been there and done that a time or two....lately more than before.. Well done Sir. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I have to admit that I've been amused by the fact that I've been hallucinating...I mean, it figures, right? (wranx has been keeping too much of his own company...and WAY too much of his own council) But, no Ed...I'll not call to it No, "Here kitty mousey blobbything!" |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed You brought the reader right into the wonder of your vision with this poem. You are an intuitive and aware person, it makes sense to me that you would see and feel things out of the ordinary. I have seen a few things myself, but they were things of light. Take care of you, ok!?  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
ah, skirting madness is fun..good times good times..sometimes |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
As Dave Allen said Go with your God, whomever and whatever, you consider him or her to be. Can you house train the sprites to tidy up. regards Dave |
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Mary Parry Junior Member
since 2004-10-12
Posts 45Felixstowe, England |
I know what they are. They're Woodbridge Woofanpoofs. They live just down the road from me. Send them back! Mary |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Fantabulous Brother Ed, you are indeed a wonder. it's a keeper. oh and I am still thinking, and trying not to hurt myself during the process LOL.you WILL hear from me soon. Mxx  cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx Perhaps you cast illusions line To fish a fish you wish to dine Aligning all the true and real To see your shadows of appeal And in the depth within the core You'd sneek a peek of evermore. A fine write. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
i'm tellin ya a cat will kill them things they are always seeing them and this was superb Ed smile WELL DONE and I like Sy's too |
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