Open Poetry #33 |
True Stories |
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Stories You know so many of mine. Like, the way the plum tree grew into a horse; but did you know the dirt and the roads that led away from play? In the other place, a face, just a girl at the third floor window. Does it seem she’s dressed in lace, her red cork curls idle? I knew she had a fever and I didn’t imagine her sallow skin, I could see it’s pale surface a reflection of my own, her eyes must be where the scarlet was. I searched mine. She never knew I watched her and in my child’s heart I worried that those stairs she had to walk some day would be mine. When I saw her later out in the air, her body fluffy and her walk slow, I tried to be kind, not stare. But I searched her for some truth she knew and I couldn’t find it. I played jacks in the basement below my third grade class, the echo still resounds within me where my dresses twirled and I sat cross legged on cold cement to win friends. I don’t remember the rules to the game of hopscotch but do you think it is important on this day to tell you how many times I prayed? [This message has been edited by Martie (10-11-2004 11:15 PM).] |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
this tugs at the heart strings - sweet Martie Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Such a simple story of a child's heart, but so well told! KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Words written in such a way they can only be yours Martie. This is...wonderful! Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Martie, you're amazing yanno, absolutely amazing. You make us feel. and I love it when you do. it's a keeper. Mxx cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Many threads of strong emotion. It is always moving to read your work. *smile* |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
very moving Martie..... ~~*~~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
totally stunning |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
her eyes must be where the scarlet was .... I've always enjoyed reading you Martie |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Hi, Martie! This sure was one that pulled some of my own memories to the surface. Great write! .......jo |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Martie - how beautifully you pull the reader in and leave them touched with emotion. Yes, you are amazing! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's better now, to know the true voice behind the soul sung words... and it carries a deeper impact to know how you stare off into not space, but places, as you feel the words come to layer you... I miss you. My love to you, and Taylor. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"When I saw her later out in the air, her body fluffy and her walk slow, I tried to be kind, not stare. But I searched her for some truth she knew and I couldn’t find it." Enjoyed the read Martie, your visuals took me right there... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
it is in the stillness of courage and truth that love wraps and produces miracles there is no better healing than a plate of love and love is the tie that binds in all purposeful giving of self, significance and closing the circle of caring for anothers quality of life, to the point of kindness we never thought we were capable of...there is great truth in the words of God regardless if written by profits or words of men...goodness is love, truth is love warm eyes, placing a hand on the cheek of someone in need, feeding them with great courage...live it, feel it...be alive within around and for...as nothing but nothing can take away love...but instead develops great growth.... In the distance between, I lay my thoughts on you and Taylor...with warm smiles and great hugs...love you both, so very much. Thank you for taking the time to write and share...lovely lady/poetess. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
where my dresses twirled and I sat cross legged on cold cement to win friends. you weave masterfully . . . a tale within a tale within truth. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
but do you think it is important on this day to tell you how many times I prayed? You capture our minds with the stories... capture our hearts with the ending... excellent write! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Martie, This tugged on me, too. You have a special way of gathering and presenting ideas the reader can so easily relate. I admire you and your skills. cathy |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Martie ... no one can string words together like you dear poetess. You do your craft so darn well. This is such a gift ... hugs, Marti A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ There is no doubt in my mind that you are the ink of the heart~ Martiesque Moments you so artfully weave ... ribboning your thoughts to touch our hearts~ And ... you do it everytime~ Love to you my sister true~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes, I know for a certainty that these stories are true.... and I can attest that they are True. They're also something else that is deeper than mere truth...they are windows into the soul of a passionate and compassionate woman. That's a view worth gold. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
She never knew I watched her and in my child’s heart I worried that those stairs she had to walk some day would be mine. Just my, my, my Martie! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - you say so much so deeply and touch me so deeply - what a powerfully poem this is - Paul |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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