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Border line (an anthology type poem)
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Border line (an anthology type poem) |
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Don_Juan Member
since 2004-04-08
Posts 252Far from where I am going 
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(i tried this type of poetry out which is more or less a poem of characters in a story but is far from prose. it starst with a opening poem to set the scene and then the stories of 10 characters. it's new to me but let me know what you think.) In a world that dances along the borderline of a hariline fracture between reality and immorality the immortality of one decision affects all through the burning coals of betrayl the overthrow of the better by those considered not and all visades crumble beneath the weight of a pen. welcome home. 1. The Love Lorn (the promiscuous) lonliness highlighted by many conquests of a sexual nature endeavors dealt through an ill fated mind one to one hour stands yet hollow tones ring out in my chest ribcage is the only cage to imprison my heart an uncommiting mind the lock and key the search for a soul to match mine leads a searching soul to a conquest of another sort. 2. The World Torn (The confused) the events of unexpected expectancy unsurmountable conflicts where do my actions lie? the sand passes over me time dies will i ever know where my actions lie? 3. The Insecure (The Tough Exterior) a fighter a warrior draped like a cloak around a child stareing into the mirror who have i become? the weaker form of a former self stand strong you must but the mirror tells no lies. 4.The Egomaniacal an aura of supremacy in an era of tyranny forcebally ruling through opressive contradictions hypocrisy my weapon a better than the rest disposition unlawful and uncaring exterminate the unworthy bring war among underlings the overconfident will prevail. 5.The Liar the dominant hand of tyranny covering loose contraband and dispelling controversy analytical and charismatic my word is law when no truth abounds my betrayl of believers much like childs play. 6. The optomistic pessimist confused and distraught more informed than before but uncertain morals and ethics obscured can revolution usurp a tyrannical ruler? 7.The Humble my eyes have not seen the glory of the prevail of justice overconfidence praised the timid overshadowed run down as prey to a ravenous predator knowledge for change a weapon among weapons wielded by the content innovation of knowledge the perfect tool of change. 8. The innovator loop holes new ideals the timid shall rule as overconfidence plays to the demise of all powerful the horn of revolution abounds I transform 9. The Revolutionist new world order turmoil statements overthrow of tyranny by those looked down upon a quick strike all is changed the better banished those deserving inherit the land long live revolution to short change tyranny. 10. The Recorder the uprising of the humble the fall of the overconfident one vociferous battlecry in the silence of night as the throne was taken a king of tyranny overthrown in a castle siege undeling becomes master master becomes nothing a land unified under the masses a love lorn egomaniacal liar was surprised and overthrown by a humble innovating revolutionist as the descision for death of the timid came to pass horrifying acts prevented 'twas poetic justice. nice use of muffin |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Quite brilliant, and captivating... I think you have brought a refreshing and dead honest form to our eyes. Very Excellent. TD |
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Don_Juan Member
since 2004-04-08
Posts 252Far from where I am going |
thankyou for the comment. It's not really all that hard of a poem to write as in form. The only difficult part is thinking of characters and a story. anywho thanks very much nice use of muffin |
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